I tried to address some of the problems brought up by my peer reviewers and friends who read my story. I'm going to quote some of the comments, and explain how/why I addressed them.

"And what's with Christina if she just got married or is getting married?"
I have added a scene in which Christina visits June in the hospital after her accident and ( Read more... )

When I expressed issues with characterization, Obi told me to describe my classmates Kiera, Pat, and my best friend. Well, I just don't feel comfortable describing people I know but don't know, like Kiera and Pat. So I chose just to describe my best friend, Sarah ( Read more... )

...was to compare our story's progress to the checklists in our textbook in the chapter on the "short short story." Somehow I totally missed this assignment being assigned. Oops. So I am going to try to do this here briefly.

Obi told us to divide our story into three or four movements (I can’t remember which) so I will try to do that here.

PART ONE
PART TWO
PART THREE
PART FOUR

I'm devastated.

I am not a confident writer. Nor am I a confident person. Writing is difficult for me; it is also something that I frankly do not particularly enjoy. On the other hand, writing is what I do, or what I'd like to do, and the rush of sitting back with something complete, something of my own creation, in front of me, is a feeling like none other. But ( Read more... )

I originally wrote a much different and much shorter version of this story three years ago. Last year, I wrote this version for my Creative Writing Class. I have decided to focus on this story yet again, with the hope that I can lengthen it and polish it to a final story I could be proud to present to a wider audience.

( The Mattress )