Wild intentions 2/..

[4everxd]

Chapter 2

Author: 4everxd  or Cutie Angel
Disclaimer: I don’t own them but I wish I did.
Pairing: Yunjae
Genre: Romance, Humor
Rating: NC-17
Warning: Clumsy Jaejoong(?)
Summary: Jaejoong needed to start working out again and who is the best person to help him other than Jung Yunho?

A/N: At the italic part I suggest you to listen to Koda Kumi-

Comments

[hattukissa]

Whoah, you've already gotten so much better! Your writing is much more fluent than before~ You wanted constructive criticism and I'll give you that ^^ I can't really think of anything bad to say though XD you had a lot less mistakes with the grammar! Only a few spelling mistakes and missing commas and such but overall you've improved a lot O__O I was really surprised when I read this because you already got so much better O__O I'm sure you're going to become really good at writing if you just continue!! I think you should definitely continue writing! Just read the fic over a few times and you'll see the small mistakes ^^ You should also learn how to make an lj cut and if you want more opinions, you should post to communties so other people can read your fics too

[4everxd]

OMG Really? I am so happy I improved! ^___^ Also the more I write the easier it gets so I will definately continue writing! :D Lol at all the -> O_O but seriously I didn't think I would improve this fast, I thought it would take time xD Yep when I have time and a clear mind I will re-read everything so I can spot the mistakes and fix them! Ugh...about that I don't know but I don't have a good relationship with lj besides commeting on others peoples' fics. I don't know how to organize it~ like how to put the lj cut or how to make a masterlist that will stay on top of the page so that will keep me organized >.< Please help if you can juseyo~ <3