15. sunrise

[botherd]

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Two days late, but I'm finally halfway there! \o/ It feels like it's downhill from here so hopefully catching up shouldn't be too much of a problem. This chapter kept going off in the wrong direction but I think I managed to rein it in.

15. sunrise
Naomi.
1992 words

Comments

[smeetie]

Oh, gutted. You can really feel the characters so much that it's painful sometimes!

[artemis_malvoti]

I kept hoping that Naomi would say "gotcha! You did get in!" but that would be too simple.

Ps I love this story!

[lovely_noise]

Love this again, obviously, but just a bit confused as to why they're so pessamistic about the whole thing. I get that they've been fighting lately, and that the distance would add stress, but it didn't seem like anything love couldn't cope with.

Were they just being melodramatic then or did I miss some subtlties?

[botherd]

I guess partly it was due to them being melodramatic (esp. Emily, because I think not getting into her first choice uni would make her whole future feel up in the air) but I think it was more than that? There's the sense that if they're finding it hard to make it work when they're together, it would be even more difficult if they're apart, and I think Emily feels like she's more invested in the relationship than Naomi (because she spent so long chasing her, because Naomi wouldn't make an effort with her parents) so she's worried that Naomi won't stick around if Emily's not there, constantly making an effort. Katie gave her the advice to not be so clingy, but I don't think she's the sort of person who can easily step back.

... that's how it goes in my head, anyway, but I'm not sure how successful I've been in communicating that in the actual text. (This was actually meant to be an Emily chapter, and if I hadn't made the stupidest mistake ever and written it from the wrong character's PoV, maybe more of this would have come across.)

[thefantasticfox]

Ooh...taking the hard way out. ouch. well I'm glad you chose to not give everything to them. That'd be too easy wouldn't it? They're still sweet, nevertheless ;D

O and a lil more than halfway! Major kudoss man

[torak303]

aww, this chapter :( This hits a little closer to home, my wife has just gone for a MASSIVE JOB INTERVIEW THAT WILL MAKE HER DREAM CAREER KICK START and I'm so scared that she won't get it, and I'll have absolutely no idea what to do. So I can tell this is awesomely written, because their heartbreak is just like the one I'm really scared of.

Beautiful chapter, and YAY OVER HALFWAY MARK!!! :D Downhill stretch!