7. another way to make it right

[botherd]

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Who has two thumbs and is still behind on wordcount? Ugh. Most of this was written in a rush and I think I got pretty far from the point I was trying to make, but whatever. Should be another update later tonight.

7. another way to make it right
Jenna.
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Comments

[botherd]

Thanks! :D

[brainy_poo]

Love seeing something from the point of view of Jenna, really well written and a very interesting chapter, I like Jenna observing Naomi and Emily together, seeing how happy Naomi makes Emily and agreeing to try. Was definitely a character I wanted to hear from and you don't see that many stories around that actual take a deeper look at what the parents think.

[botherd]

Thank you! I found it really interesting to explore the parents a bit.

[keepix3]

"she looks like she's two seconds away from rolling her eyes, but trying her hardest to refrain."

That made me laugh, I could totally picture that ^^ Nice chapter!

[botherd]

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. :D

[flister]

Ooh, Jenna, eh? I also liked seeing things from her POV. I kind of hope that things go down on the show like they have here but I doubt it :s

Lovely image of them waking up together. It's probably something like that that would do it - just observing them as people in love. And she's clearly never seen Katie like that so it must get her somewhere that her daughter is happy.

Hope you don't mind but just to point out: "Does this mean you're going to actually Naomi now? Have you changed your mind?" - missing a word in there somewhere.

<3

[botherd]

Oh, lol, thanks for pointing that out. That's what happens when you type too quickly!

[flister]

No worries - I always appreciate it when other people point out stuff like to me so assume that others do too! :)

[supergoodtimes]

This is the first time I've felt sympathy for Jenna. Not sure if I was supposed to but because it's written from her POV,
you can see that she is actually trying in some form or another to deal with her situation with Emily, and that she genuinely cares for her.

[botherd]

Thanks! I was aiming for a bit of sympathy for her - I mean, she's kind of a homophobe and not always a great mother, but I do think she genuinely wants the best for her daughters.