baby kiss real slow

[that_flies]

Title: Baby Kiss Real Slow
Pairing: Joe Thornton/Patrick Marleau
Team: Sharks
Rating: R, as some content may be inappropriate for young children. lol.
Joe's POV
A/N: You all know what happens when you get that idea at a quarter to 1 in the morning and end up finishing at half past 2. It was one of those nights.

Comments

[suicidal_knife]

It was awesome! =). Although I don't particularly like the way you space your lines, it makes the story move at a fast pace.

[that_flies]

thank you! :]
haha, I just didn't want to make it seem to short. But that's the pace I wanted, so maybe it worked? XD

[suicidal_knife]

It totally did (:.

[revuko]

Sometimes the early morning stories are the best :)
Two things I noticed though, you said shacking when I think you meant shaking, and you used 'hi' instead of 'his'
But I wouldn't worry too much about it! Just fix them when you can, because god knows it happens to everyone.
Oh, and I really liked it by the way ;)

And win deprived? Amen to that.

[that_flies]

Lmaooo whoops. Thanks for pointing those out. I'll go fix them asap.
thank youu. :]

I know right? Come on boys.

[revuko]

Haha no problem :)

Seriously though! I even bought a pair of teal pants yesterday.
I don't want to wear them if they're playing like this D:

[revuko]

LOL I forgot to sign in

[iamameliarawr]

i had no idea you wrote this.
<3333333333.

write the ryans yeah?

[that_flies]

mia darling. <3

i will for you, :]

[sherlockelly]

I don't know why it took me so long to review this!

I ADORE IT!!!! Patty!fic is one of my all time favorite things ever. He's just so sweet!!!

[that_flies]

your icon is so beautiful. oh patty.
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thank you so much! he's probably the sweetest guy ever, ngl.

[b_mofan07]

i love this fic...it's so freakin hot...needs to cool down