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[eggybread]

title: The Conklin (Ty)angle
involves: Marc-Andre Fleury/Ty Conklin, and Jaro Halak
rating: R
summary: The Conklin Triangle, where you're already drawn in at two. Marc's trying to prevent the unknown, bizarre effects of three.
notes: This was done a little bit with Caddyshack and a lot with I'm Alright by Kenny Loggins. ;)
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[lite_bright]

You're back! I am pretty psyched

[eggybread]

You remembered Ty's alive!! :D

And with such a nice critique, how can I not be thrilled.

Wow, you got a lot more enjoyment out of this than I thought anyone would, even after I realized "I'm Alright" would make a good songfic for this.

I'm also impressed by the seamlessness you saw in something I felt was quite disjointed. (Halak, of course, is hovering over things the entire time. And may very well show up in again...)

You said a ton, and I love your commentary as always; it will never grow old for me. Much pleased author appreciation. ;)

[lite_bright]

I usually do! It was just that Old Weirdbeard Mason was playing all the time, it was miserable and as a coping strategy, I apparently decided that Conklin had suffered some grievous end (capped by a suitably wacky funeral) and that was why he was never playing. Your boy is pretty great, still. :D

It's a really intriguing choice for the story, and honestly I puzzled over it, but when coupled with the non-textual elements, it worked really well. So, however that happened, it's great.

Disjointed, hmm. There's certainly some of that, and it might be that there are sections that read in that way, but the ways in which it becomes a complete story are very interesting, and fairly compelling. (not that the rest is uncompelling! why do I say things in this way.) Halak is a mystery here, and that's elegant, with something like,

"...We're like the same side of a magnet. You know?"There's a hint of more there, and if that stays on the ice, great, and if it powers the narrative, also great -- although likely to have to some consequences. And

[eggybread]

oh, don't remind me about Mason getting ALL THE PLAYING TIME....
*grits teeth*
You certainly didn't see him inspiring any fic from me.

Jaro has to sign his darn contract first, and then we'll see, but I couldn't resist the conjunction of the three of them through no fault of my own... ;)

Continue diatribe-ing, please. It's always an interesting way for me to view my own work, through this kind of perspective.

[jess_the1]

Silly Marc, Jaro is Carey's so you have nothing to worry about.;p

[eggybread]

Jaro hasn't reckoned on his freedom andhaving to deal with Ty. ;)

[brigidmn]

"You love him." No implication in his tone, staring at the clean sheet of ice.

The "ho" is still there. "I-- Yeah. Well, you try not to."

Sums up exactly how I feel about Fleury. I don't mean to love him...I just can't help it.

And thank you for writing this, especially right now, as I've been craving something Fleury for the past few days. Love it :D

[eggybread]

And ho..w do you know that's not Ty being referred to? :D

(Actually, it was deliberately left ambiguous, so. I see MAF and Ty as a lot more alike than it would sometimes seem.

Both ridiculously easy to love, definitely. ;)

[a_symphony_in_c]

Perfect.

[eggybread]

no way.

Perfect how? :D

[a_symphony_in_c]

in the brief, contained frame of the prose - never too much, just enough. short and halting, like their own exchange, but easy in the way you would expect them to communicate. Just enough push and pull. something about ty's last words that give this whole thing meaning.

it's unmistakable in almost all your pieces, and it's more or less my favourite prose style to read in this comm :)

so...

[belial]

Poor, poor Jaro. He doesn't stand a chance against a jealous bitch like MAF.

I love you. I am so glad you suggested I go back through and find you, cause now... well... i may love you. :)

Re: so...

[eggybread]

Aw, shucks, thanks...

You know, if you really want, you can always be a pioneer and review the story that nobody else did... ;)