What You Don't Surrender

[leigh57]

Title: What You Don’t Surrender
Author: leigh57
Characters: Jack Bauer, Renee Walker
Summary: Post S7 AU in which Jack and Renee spend some time being Team Awesome.
Warnings: Language, mild violence.
Disclaimer: They’re not mine. Nope. Still not. I checked.
A/N: Under the cut.

Comments

[dealan311]

Wait, what? Fic from you? Best surprise ever. You didn't even have them have sex in this one and I'm still grinning like mad. :) :) :)

I like the action. The chaos and confusion work and the descriptions in the firefight just pop off the screen. I like the little details you put in, like the distracting pain in her foot and the sounds of crunching glass. Also, heehee to the vampire show. True Blood? Really, Renee? At least go for Vampire Diaries if you're going to go for a vampire show. LOL.

Thanks for writing Team Awesome being awesome, though. This was a lovely piece of action mixed in with their typical altruism.

[leigh57]

Oh icon. That one makes me giggle every time!

You didn't even have them have sex in this one and I'm still grinning like mad.

Dude they didn't even kiss! Or think about kissing! What is the world coming to?

Also, Renee's just suffering from my lack of pop culture knowledge when I try to make a funny. It's not her fault I'm a stupid writer who kind of doesn't know the difference between True Blood and The Vampire Diaries or which happens to be on HBO;)

And aw, thanks for commenting. It was so much fun to write again, but boy this was a weird one for me. I tried?

[leigh57]

Thank you for reading and commenting. It makes me smile:)

[marinw]

Like this:

Jack’s voice cracked in unpredictable places.

See? You can TOO write action.

Maybe she should buy him some of that moisturizing stuff Chloe had recommended at lunch the other day.

I can just see Chloe saying that! Chloe and Renee doing lunch together-what a concept.

[leigh57]

You can TOO write action.

I'm still highly skeptical, but thank you very much:) I just missed writing, so this felt great no matter what the result.

OMG Renee and Chloe having lunch. That would be kind of made of hilarious, wouldn't it?

[mulefa]

Loved it - great tension - great characterisation

[leigh57]

Thank you for reading:) It makes me so happy to know I'm not alone in still loving these characters even though they're gone!

[kcountess]

KAJHDKJSADKASJHKSHSD SO MUCH LOVE. THIS IS THE JACK AND RENEE I LOVE FROM S7.

Just, gah, the action is so good and the characterization is bang-on for these two. They are the well-oiled machine that is Team Awesome.

(S8? What S8? In the Schroedinger box, lalalala)

[leigh57]

THIS IS THE JACK AND RENEE I LOVE FROM S7.

Aw. *snugs you* I'm so happy that you liked it. I felt so weird trying to write action, but I gave it my best shot -- no pun intended. Also squee that you feel the characterization worked:)

I'm still snorffling about your analogy between S8 and Shroedinger's box. I LOVE it.