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[Fanfiction] Crash Course in Polite Conversation {Lost}

Nov 01, 2010 22:18

TITLE: Crash Course in Polite Conversation
SERIES: Family Portrait - Part 12/25
FANDOM: Lost
AUTHOR: nicis_anatomy
CHARACTER: Juliet Carlson/Jack Shephard (mentions Richard/Rachel)
GENRE: het, romance, angst
RATING: PG-13
WORD COUNT: 1,890
SUMMARY: Juliet asks Jack to move in with him, but the thing doesn't work as smooth as they both expected ... ( Read more... )

{format} series, {feature} juliet_jack, {fandom} lost, {feature} jack shephard, {community} schmoop_bingo, {community} 100_tales, {feature} juliet burke

Comments 11

lormats November 1 2010, 23:08:20 UTC

♥ mawwwwww it wasn't so angst, and ♥ (ok my comment definitely sucks) Juliet patience amaze me and *insert coherent feedback here* Not my best day apparently... (offers another cookie for being a sucky reader)

nicis_anatomy November 1 2010, 23:24:33 UTC

You should have seen the first version ;) I'm glad I could add some more happiness to all this angst to make it a bit better ;) Of course, Juliet is patient. That's what she can do best - I think.
Thank you for the cookies ;) But you are NOT a sucky ready. How can you even think that?

lormats November 1 2010, 23:28:12 UTC

mmm cuz my comment was like blah blah blah (not having a very eloquent day I'm afraid)...

and you kno I'd love to see with some chapter the first version and then the second (lol I'm like a groupie I like to see that kind of things)

nicis_anatomy November 2 2010, 10:28:05 UTC

I love every comment (from you) ;)
But a groupie?? lol That's awesome. Do you want an autograph?

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pann_cake November 2 2010, 00:27:35 UTC

Eep! So cute! I love domestic fics, and this was so adorable. It was just angsty enough, I thought, because moving in with someone doesn't go so easy and there's always drama. ;) Juliet is a stronger woman and I am, hanging his baseball poster up in the dining room (but I am also a Yankee fan and hate that Jack loves the Red Sox, lol!).

I love this part: It was tragic and he couldn't even begin to imagine how it would feel if it ever happened to him and Juliet; fighting over something and never getting the chance to apologize … that was even worse than never getting the chance to say goodbye.

It reminded me so much of them on the island! Not only did they leave on bad terms before Jack left on the helicopter (her last line to him always breaks my heart, "Try not to kill yourself Jack"), but also in the 70s she was upset at him, and then he never got to make it up to her before she died and at least become friends again. :(((

Nicely done, hun, I love this chapter. Can't wait for more!

nicis_anatomy November 2 2010, 10:33:02 UTC

I'm glad you do. Thank you!
The first version had even more angst - just because I agree with you that moving in with someone is always difficult. I didn't want it to be different with them - although it was hard to let them fight over unimportant things and then Jack ran away.
I have no idea if the Red Sox should be better or the Yankess. I only know them by name ;) But don't blame Jack for it - it's his father's fault *g*

Yes!Yes! It worked ;) I wanted it to be a reminder of the island and how "The Incident" affected Jack. We never really saw it, but I'm sure he felt so guilty for Juliet's death ... and my own special theory is that in the sideways world he tried to make up for all this, by giving her the life she never had because of Ben and him. He must have known that this was his second chance ...

Thank you ;) I will try to start "Snowed in" today, but I can't promise anything other than that you can expect it this week ;)

squeakyboots November 2 2010, 01:57:49 UTC

"I'm sorry for being such a bastard sometimes. I don't want to, but … I don't know, maybe I'm more like my father than I'd hoped to be. He always leaves when my parents have a fight. Like I did."
"Does he normally bring your mother such beautiful flowers, too?" Juliet asked, pointing at the red roses on the table.
"Sometimes." Jack sighed heavily.

I LOVED this exchange SO MUCH, especially Jack's reluctant admission here that after all his defiance, he's worried that he will end up like his father. Also, Jack's answer to Juliet's question is really unpredictable and sophisticated writing. Good stuff! Oh, and this:

"No, it isn't. But … you can have that for free. As much and as often as you want to."

GUH. What an offer! ;)

nicis_anatomy November 2 2010, 10:35:23 UTC

Wow, thank you ;) I'm glad it worked - especially this part of the conversation. I had a hard time writing it (as always, when Christian is involved), but I'm glad it worked.
And the offer ... well, Juliet is a lucky girl, isn't she *g*

nighttiming1022 November 3 2010, 03:50:42 UTC

He resting his chin on her shoulder, deep inhaling the sent that was both Juliet and home for him

I loved this so much <3 so sweet

But... I loved how you brought it around to making it up to her. I completely think that this world was where they worked out all that they left unsaid, unfinished. She cared about him, he left. She died, all he wanted to do was "fix it" So that's why I love the little angst (their island life) with the fluff (fixing it in the sideways) :)

nicis_anatomy November 3 2010, 09:18:13 UTC

That is what I am trying to write. It's not easy, but it's also fun. I have this soft spot for happy endings and I hate unsolved fights/problems.
I'm glad you liked. Thank you very much.