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Challenge #9: Reincarnation

Jan 31, 2005 01:54

Title: The Wheel
Spoilers: None. Up to v.5.
Rating: PG-13
Words: 100 x 4
Notes: So I was struggling with my reincarnation fic, and then I've discovered this new fun activity - boiling 30-page pieces down to 400 words. Every chapter / drabble is a different reincarnation in a different boy's POV. Please do not hesitate to tell me it's stupid and my ( Read more... )

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devikun January 30 2005, 18:28:18 UTC

Actually, your English isn't too bad, and the drabbles are interesting! I really like Scene and Experiment! (Gee, I wonder why) Scene is really well paced and descriptive enough without diluting its focus.

A tip about the layout in Experiment, if its ok? Maybe try and make sure each piece of dialoge is owned by the speaker? I'm not much of a writer, but I got a bit lost as to who was saying what in the way each piece of dialogue and description was on a separate line. I think it works really well to write something like:

He laughs, a strange hoarse sound. "Professor, you are a piece of work."

Providing that's what you intended.

Anyway, they're good! Thanks for sharing them!

devikun January 30 2005, 18:29:01 UTC

oops! Forgot to close my italics tag there. D'oh!

new_kate February 3 2005, 07:08:50 UTC

Thank you! *hugs* Great tip!
I so need to read up on grammar.
I myself am a total slave to 85 goodness. And your icon is just lovely. Hakkai has such a scaryseme smile!

nightfallrising January 30 2005, 18:33:45 UTC

A bunch of these are intriguing! Hope you post the 30-page versions.

new_kate February 3 2005, 07:10:25 UTC

Oooh, enabling! *melts* Thank you! *insert maniac giggles*

mistressrenet January 30 2005, 19:02:34 UTC

I like Experiment best. Lots of good ideas here!

new_kate February 3 2005, 07:17:27 UTC

In my head this AU is all very complicated and X-filesy what with the secret research lab, and crack science ideas, and their little conspiracy to save non-human Goku who is possibly eeeevil, but in the end of the day it's all about the porn. Yeah.

mistressrenet February 3 2005, 07:19:17 UTC

Sounds good to me.

shotglass January 31 2005, 12:30:27 UTC

I think I liked Intensive Care best, though they were equally well-done. And your English is great!

new_kate February 3 2005, 07:20:45 UTC

Thank you! Sanzo would make a great surgeon, ne? He's cynical and brave, and has steady hands! :)