wow, when I just saw that there was a comment already, I was like... "Woooha, there is someone fast in reading!" XD Yeah... a lot of angst, but nothing's over yet ^.~
Sometimes fate can be really funny... just as I loaded my f-list, "ame no orchestra" began to play and it went all dark and rained XD only seconds later I noticed your new chapter. How very, very fitting.
This chap really was like an emotional turmoil, in between I wanted to hit something xD First I was shocked how you let Jin say it right there in bed with Kazuya and I kept mumbling "What's she doing?! O_O" and also the following thoughts and actions puzzled me a lot and for a few moments I felt like I couldn't emotionally follow the story anymore. One piece of the puzzle was missing to make me feel like the development of the story feels right... but I wasn't disappointed x'D It was the part ending with this line “As usual, bad timing, Kazuya.” that totally hit the spot T____T Yes, this development feels so very right (as in 'perfect story!' - not that I want them to break up x.X) and I can absolutely empathize with Jin's (re)actions and train of thoughts v.v
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That's really fate O_o Oh yeah, Ame no Orchestra would really be one of those songs that fit this chapter just perfectly v.v
I told you it would be the "out of the blue chapter" *laughs* Already that very first conversation with Yamapi... Yamapi talking about Tegoshi, Jin finding the similarities to Kazuya... and saying that he would break up with him so suddenly, and the reader is so not prepared for that. And I'm not quite sure, why I did that for their break up, but I probably just wanted that reaction: Ehat happens there is completely nonsense. They're actings are just so different from what they talk about. They decide to break up, but still don't move a bit, still can't let go of each other. And of course, they didn't really move from that spot until Jin made that final step in the end. Not believing in what Kazuya said... I was SO mad at Jin afterwards myself *laugh* But I knew you would be one of those persons who can empathize with him <33
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Yes I know it would be xD but while reading I forgot about it *laughs* However, as said, in the end it felt right to me, so it wasn't really all "out of the blue". Seriously, keep saying what you want, you're a genuine writer!! ò.Ó Accept it! ;D
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*löl* Thanks for that compliment ^__^ *happy* Yeah, okay, it wasn't completely out of the blue if you look at it from that nagle, but it just was so off topic in their conversation *LÖL* That's probably what I meant... O.o
Yeah, everyone is just mad at Jin *laugh* Although I tried to let the reader see what it is going on in Jin's head, what makes him do all that. Of course, I have to admit, that he's stupid to doubt it when Kazuya says he loves him, but well... v.v Of course Kazuya's not completely innocent with this. If Jin would have been sure of Kazuya's love for him, he might would not ahve made those decisions, ne~? But I'm so glad you're at his side <3 I want people to be not just mad at him, but also feel pity for his confused feelings!
Haha, well, okay.. I'm not quite sure if it'll ever get any worse, if any chapter will be as sad as this one again or even sadder. Probably.
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Yeah... a lot of angst, but nothing's over yet ^.~
Thanks! I hope you'll like it!
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still hoping for a happy ending. *sobs*
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Eeeh~ Oh my God! I'm sorry! I didn't mean to >.<
Only to make up for that I will have to amke it one, I guess v.v
Thanks for reading and commenting, though. And, Congratulations <3
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i like this~
it made my day~
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Thanks so much, I'm glad it hit your taste <3
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I'm sorry. I had to do this. But nothing's over yet~ ^^
Thanks for the comment!
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you made me all teary eyed. i don't like angst but it's always too good to pass. i'm just afraid there won't be a happy ever after?
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I'm sorry for that, but to be honest, that was my intention v.v I actually like angst, but only in combination with a happy end ^.~
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This chap really was like an emotional turmoil, in between I wanted to hit something xD First I was shocked how you let Jin say it right there in bed with Kazuya and I kept mumbling "What's she doing?! O_O" and also the following thoughts and actions puzzled me a lot and for a few moments I felt like I couldn't emotionally follow the story anymore. One piece of the puzzle was missing to make me feel like the development of the story feels right... but I wasn't disappointed x'D It was the part ending with this line “As usual, bad timing, Kazuya.” that totally hit the spot T____T Yes, this development feels so very right (as in 'perfect story!' - not that I want them to break up x.X) and I can absolutely empathize with Jin's (re)actions and train of thoughts v.v ( ... )
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I told you it would be the "out of the blue chapter" *laughs*
Already that very first conversation with Yamapi... Yamapi talking about Tegoshi, Jin finding the similarities to Kazuya... and saying that he would break up with him so suddenly, and the reader is so not prepared for that.
And I'm not quite sure, why I did that for their break up, but I probably just wanted that reaction: Ehat happens there is completely nonsense.
They're actings are just so different from what they talk about. They decide to break up, but still don't move a bit, still can't let go of each other.
And of course, they didn't really move from that spot until Jin made that final step in the end. Not believing in what Kazuya said...
I was SO mad at Jin afterwards myself *laugh* But I knew you would be one of those persons who can empathize with him <33 ( ... )
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Yeah, okay, it wasn't completely out of the blue if you look at it from that nagle, but it just was so off topic in their conversation *LÖL*
That's probably what I meant... O.o
Yeah, everyone is just mad at Jin *laugh* Although I tried to let the reader see what it is going on in Jin's head, what makes him do all that.
Of course, I have to admit, that he's stupid to doubt it when Kazuya says he loves him, but well... v.v Of course Kazuya's not completely innocent with this. If Jin would have been sure of Kazuya's love for him, he might would not ahve made those decisions, ne~?
But I'm so glad you're at his side <3 I want people to be not just mad at him, but also feel pity for his confused feelings!
Haha, well, okay.. I'm not quite sure if it'll ever get any worse, if any chapter will be as sad as this one again or even sadder.
Probably.
*nuzzles against you*
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