I honestly think that the commenter above needs to get off her high horse.
She's taken a lot of creative writing classes? Alright, so some of the things she said did make sense(the use of semi-colons, and some great comma placement). That doesn't change the fact that other things that she said make no sense, especially about ideas that are supposed to be left to interpretation.
Would you call this first love?
That line is perfectly fine.
Not everything is supposed to be in just black or white. Some things are gray, and those are the things that readers should think about themselves.
Oh. I must apologize. I was under the impression that people who wrote wanted to get better at writing and know where they make mistakes and what other readers want to look for and read when reading other peoples' work.
I must apologize that I don't sugar coat everything I say to the point that all I say is, "It's perfect. You had great detail. The imagery was there." especially when some of those aspects are not there
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I don't care about getting trolled. If it's supposed to be an insult to me, it's not. I feel it's more of an insult to xxtsubasaxx. I was never one for caring about trolling. :P
Anyhoo! I feel that we've spammed her journal enough with nonsense. Find me elsewhere if you wish.
Lawl, it was never meant to be an insult, and honestly, I'm pretty much pressing buttons for the hell of it.
Also, yeah, agreed. While I'm sure this positively riveting debate is leaving millions speechless and in awe, neither of us care enough. Hell, I'm sure that in reality, you're not half bad. Either way, farewell?
P.S. I used red because it's easier to read the comments within the work. If I could have used a word document I would have used the "comment" feature. I could have chose blue. Would the color have made a difference? I was mainly just trying to separate my comments from her piece so it did not look as though it was part of her piece of writing within my comment/suggestions.
If the color I chose bothered you and made it seem as though I was imposing and more or less forcing an ultimatum on the writer, that I do sincerely apologize for.
She's taken a lot of creative writing classes? Alright, so some of the things she said did make sense(the use of semi-colons, and some great comma placement). That doesn't change the fact that other things that she said make no sense, especially about ideas that are supposed to be left to interpretation.
Would you call this first love?
That line is perfectly fine.
Not everything is supposed to be in just black or white. Some things are gray, and those are the things that readers should think about themselves.
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I don't want to start bitching, because honestly I don't even care that much.
I just want to point out that it was a bit douchey.
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I must apologize that I don't sugar coat everything I say to the point that all I say is, "It's perfect. You had great detail. The imagery was there." especially when some of those aspects are not there ( ... )
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Nevermind...
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Anyhoo! I feel that we've spammed her journal enough with nonsense. Find me elsewhere if you wish.
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Also, yeah, agreed. While I'm sure this positively riveting debate is leaving millions speechless and in awe, neither of us care enough. Hell, I'm sure that in reality, you're not half bad. Either way, farewell?
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If the color I chose bothered you and made it seem as though I was imposing and more or less forcing an ultimatum on the writer, that I do sincerely apologize for.
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she's right I made loads of errors *sigh*
It's my first critiscism but I'm gna work harder :) thanks for sticking up for me ne ? :)
Oh and thanks for reading :D :D
I hope you liked it =_=
xxxx
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