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[wizkid18]

Hi everyone.
If by chance you are at all interested in my writing, this is one of the more creative assignments I have recently done for English class.
Enjoy.

A sophisticated Night on the Town`

The red gates open as artificial sunlight illuminates the setting for the evening.  Groups of temporary residents mill about on their familiar

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[madbesskidd]

Beauti.

NO WAY

[why_not23]

I think I found a mistake...

"The gates close, and a cacophonous blanket of praise encompasses the theatre."

should it not be "encompass?"

I'm probably wrong?

Re: NO WAY

[michaelj_a]

That's absolutely right, Carsten. You ARE wrong!
don't let him get to you Paul

Re: NO WAY

[why_not23]

I'm David, and I totally knew I was wrong...when I typed it, I just didn't delete it. Well, maybe I was trying to outsmart a genious. But I totally knew it wouldn't work. Well, I thought it MIGHT work, but it totally didn't.

Anyway, it's brilliant! Which you DIDN'T mention michael!

Re: NO WAY

[michaelj_a]

that's DAVID??
whoa.
I thought...oh.
what's Carsten's name?

[michaelj_a]

By the way, did you mean to say "A god of light’s white ray of glory"
or: A light of God's white ray...
OR: A white, light ray of God's glory
cause that just didn't make sense to me.
Sorry.
:)

[wizkid18]

hi, well, the only other way i could have worded it would be like
"Apollo's white ray of glory," or some other mythic god of light, who could shine down a white ray of glory (being a spotlight). I also could have called him a light god.
The light god is the lighting and effects guy, who controls all the lights and stuff on the stage, see.
I hope its clearer to you now.

Yes, Dave in your first comment your wrong, I was right.

oh okay

[michaelj_a]

I get it. The man with the light is symbolized as the god of light. There were a lot of words in that. Okay.
Man.
I bet Dave feels stupid.
Haha.
Laugh at Dave.
Not me.
haha.

Re: oh okay

[madbesskidd]

MIKE IS A
NERD.
NERD.
NERD.