in a quiet world (redux)

[whetstone]

in a quiet world (redux)
gdragon/top
dystopian au; a second take on in a quiet world, a drabble i wrote a long time ago. both are based on the quiet world by jeffrey mcdaniel.
rated r (violence)
3, 589 words

warning: please do not read if violence triggers you.

Comments

[underhand_glory]

you know what, i was doing okay until i hit this line: because #315 is named Myungsoo and liked driving cars, because #367 was Yonghwa, who was friends with Taehyun, #6830. They’d done Math League together. for some reason that's what wrecked me and now i am a mess :(

waylttttt? i would just like to say how much i love the mutilation/post scenes? which is terrible to type lol but it's true, especially the scene becomes sound. because it's remarkable how you end something so fucked up with something so pretty.

this is another a completely different level than the drabble because this is an entire world and this didn't come from the poem, it feels original so idk dude a+ stop breaking my heart

ok peace

i wish i could edit comments what is this

[whetstone]

i'm sorry!! i just didn't want them to stay numbers and have 100% of the ~action~ focused on gd and top, since presumably there are lots of other people there with lives and feelings and etc. :(

idk man but ahh thank you. :[ tbh i think they were my favorite to write, too, which is also pretty fucked up to say so we are pretty even on that point haha.

i'm happy it didn't feel like... i don't know, a rehash of the same idea or anything like that? i don't know what i'm trying to say lmao, i feel weird putting happy :DDD emoticons here for some reason. BUT YES THANK YOU ~it will mend in time~ ♥

;~;v

[lovelyable]

OH MY GOD YOU BITCH

....okay it is now five minutes later and i think i've sufficiently calmed myself down enough to not leave you just that one phrase. i can't believe this. i can't believe you.

first, for putting in the thing about one having to kill the other - i wanted to die and i honestly went NOOOOOOO when i got to it and even though it didnt happen the events succeeding it were just, ugh. it hurt so bad :c. i was so terrified :c i literally got chills down my back. i hate (love) how the only reason that top even became proactive was because of gd, that gd wished he cared and wanted him to be braver and then he was, sobs. i hate how you put lighter moments in between the terror going on that stuck with me and just broke my heart like the peanut allergy, and moments at the bar, and gd writing i love you on top's palm and how HE REMEMBERED, and the words on gd's body smearing. and on top of that you put JAY in this and top lying in gd's lap and I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU. also, this: Seunghyun drags a finger along the skin of Jiyong

[whetstone]

LMAO .__.

ok so just suffice it to say that your comment made my lunchtime/just woken up time/early afternoon time. ugh i was wondering if their characterization was inconsistent because they kept changing their minds and everything but idk, flaws and all of that. JAYYYY. i'm glad you liked the tattoo things too ;;

SIGH do you have to, now i can't get that interpretation out of my mind either y u do this~

haha it's ok i gotchu ♥

[atenais_pala]

i really want to believe the end but i can't get it out of my head that they died and the rescue mission and post-dystopian world are all just hallucinations right before gd passes. alfkaglaskgoei hdu.
I think exactly the same.

[lilacblossoms]

The quiet world idea and your take on it is truly awesome and mentions of underground resistance groups acting in spite of the danger they put themselves in is exciting to no end! But how you manage to write such a hurting story with such beautiful language I simply don't understand, I'm amazed.

Thanks for sharing.

[whetstone]

ahh i'm glad it was exciting! i've never written something action-oriented and i was worried it might be boring, so i'm happy to ear it wasn't. and thank you so much for the kind words :[

you're welcome. :)

[kimchi92]

This was really good ^^;;

one question tho~

ahh how can he talk after his tongue was cut off?

[whetstone]

thank you. :)

since top's vocal chords were unaffected and he already knew how to speak, he'd still be able to talk. he'd probably have to go to some type of rehabilitation program to be able to speak more fluently, and some sounds will always be hard-to-impossible for him to pronounce, so i tried to make sure he didn't use complete sentences or anything like that. hopefully this helps!

[kimchi92]

yes very much sooo ty <3

[ma_ca]

;_;
;o;
I can't believe you, you really like messing with other peoples mind. The end seems so beautiful again, so full of hope but then there's the fact that Seunghyun is able to talk properly again. And now I'm afraid that the end isn't real and they actually both died before the VLF was able to rescue them.

I know the poem and I stumbled over some of the drabbles people wrote to and I enjoyed them a lot but you were able to bring it to a next level and actually build a whole new world around it. And this own world brought some really interesting train of thoughts with it. Well, thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed reading it ♥

[whetstone]

i'm sorry ;_; you know, i never had that interpretation while i was writing it but i can definitely see where everyone is coming from.

thank you so much! i think mcdaniel is really great and inventive and i'm glad i didn't muck up the poem for you. you're welcome, thank you for taking the time to read. :D