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FIC: Third Time Lucky (Brad/Ray, NC17, 6760 words)

Aug 12, 2010 19:45

Title: Third Time Lucky
Author: Kali
Pairings: Brad/Ray
Rating: NC17
Summary: "It's actually kind of sad, Brad. I mean, if you don't start learning to play nice, you're gonna have to get a whore every time you want some action. You'll be fucking broke, homes.”Disclaimer: This is based on the ficionalised HBO series, not the actual people portrayed ( Read more... )

Comments 12

timeofnoreply August 12 2010, 21:43:12 UTC

So much love. I think I need a cold shower.

kali1967 August 13 2010, 18:36:27 UTC

Lol, thanks!

queeniegalore August 13 2010, 01:20:08 UTC

Dude, I loved this so much, I can't even tell you. Brad being an arsehole - seriously, even I wanted to punch him in the face at the start, and then sort of knowing he's an arsehole and getting kind of bummed about it (heh) and then RAY. Who is exactly what Brad needs. Tough and funny and not willing to take shit from Brad...until he is. Really, really willing.

UM.

And that sex scene? SERIOUSLY? So fucking hot I don't even know what to do with myself. You rock, sweetpea &hearts

“Wasn't that better than buying a whore?” He asks, and his voice is scratchy and rough. Brad looks at him, raises one eyebrow.

“About the same, I'd say,” he lies.

BRAD YOU ARE NOT FOOLING ANYBODY OKAY.

kali1967 August 13 2010, 18:37:27 UTC

I keep making Brad an asshole when I write him-I really don't mean to! But it's cool, because Ray undertands :D I'm glad you liked it s0 much :D

puckling August 13 2010, 02:02:33 UTC

Unf unf unf.

kali1967 August 13 2010, 18:37:58 UTC

Hee ^__^

schlicky August 13 2010, 02:05:04 UTC

I love this story so much. Everything about it is just wonderful. I love that Brad can't pick up girls, and that he's kind of an asshole to them. And Ray and his super skills finding him at the bar. The sex was smokin' hot - good lord. *fans self*

And I just have to say that I loved that you used the word 'slutty' to describe Ray. It's a word that I feel is not used enough. It gives such a perfect visual.

Anyway. I just wanted to let you know again how much I loved this. <333

kali1967 August 13 2010, 18:39:06 UTC

Thanks, dude! And thank you again for the awesome and super-fast beta ^__^

schlicky August 13 2010, 21:45:30 UTC

You're welcome! Anytime. :)

meeks00 August 13 2010, 13:27:38 UTC

Kali.

Once upon a time kali1967 and meeks00 had a cracktastic conversation about how awkward our dearest Bradley is with women. And then kali1967 demonstrated her genius by turning that conversation into a multiple-k fic that included everything that meeks00 loved. There was awkwardness and porn in it. And then meeks00 lived happily ever after.

THIS IS HOW ALL FAIRY TALES SHOULD GO.

♥ This is so, so perfect, my dear!

Her expression brightens and she says, “Oh, are you in the Army?”
Brad snorts, throws a glance at her that's more of a glare. “Don't fucking insult me. I'm a Marine.”
Even if I didn't love every detail and every line of dialogue and every time Brad got shot down and all of the interactions with the bartender -- even if the fic consisted only of this and then Brad getting REJECTED -- I WOULD DIE HAPPY. LOL

You wrote Brad's awkwardness so wonderfully, and it's so well-juxtaposed with how the girls just shimmy up to His Gorgeousness. I didn't question that for a minute. More girls would probably mob him if he weren't so intimidatingly beautiful.

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kali1967 August 13 2010, 18:41:03 UTC

Eeeee! *HUGS*

Thank you for the awesome comments-and for putting the idea in my head in the first place :P I'm really glad you liked it so much and sorry it took me like, a month to write the damned thing.

Also, you just picked out like, all my favourite lines from this thing, just fyi :D