Comments | war_n_peace: qu'est-ce que c'est?? Ainsi tries to write fic.

war_n_peace

qu'est-ce que c'est?? Ainsi tries to write fic.

Feb 25, 2007 15:16

RL people! please ignore! unless you really want to laugh at me.

soo... this is totally for jazzyjello, who wrote the original, The Law of the Universe a while ago and because I'm an idiot decided to sort of. steal her plot. so really! go read hers instead!!

if I haven't convinced you to leave, well. here goes I guess.

Title: You Can't Win and You Can't ( Read more... )

fic

Comments 16

jazzyjello February 26 2007, 00:43:17 UTC

♥♥♥

I HAVEN'T READ IT YET BUT I HAVE A PROBLEM WITH THE THINGS YOU SAID IN YOUR NOTES. YOU DIDN'T STEAL MY PLOT. YOU JUST WROTE THE FIC FROM A DIFFERENT POV. THAT'S COMPLETELY DIFFERENT.

war_n_peace February 26 2007, 01:45:22 UTC

BUT THERE WOULDN'T BE A FIC IF I HADN'T STOLEN YOUR GENERAL IDEAS. soo. there. *stubborn*

jazzyjello February 26 2007, 00:58:22 UTC

OMG. AINSI. THIS FIC FILLS IN ALL OF THE MISSING PIECES OF MY FIC SO WELL. I LOVE IT. SERIOUSLY. ♥♥♥

This review was typed as I read, hence the insanity:

But something misfires in your brain, (or so you tell yourself later) and all you can see are his lips, mere inches from you, and you’re kissing him instead.

sadjkas yesss.

I LIKED HOW YOU ADDED THE SCENE WITH INUI. OH INUI. HE IS NEEDED IN EVERY KAIDOH PoV FIC.

AHAHAHAH KAMIO ON A BIKE AFTER HE HAD TALKED TO MOMO WAS A NICE TOUCH.

And his lips, now engrossed in consuming an ungodly mountain of rice in a way that should be disgusting but somehow, isn’t.

THIS IS SO VERYVERY MOMOKAI. :D

Of course, Oishi did congratulate you for going an entire week without a fistfight, so maybe it is something after all.

AHAHAHA OISHI LOVE.

I love what you did with the scene with the flower petals - Echizen smirking at Kaidoh knowingly. Yessss.

Your eyes snap open almost as quickly as they closed, as you realize he is kissing you - rather badly at that -

JNFKDAKLKAD YESSS.

So you ( ... )

jazzyjello February 26 2007, 00:59:19 UTC

I'm sorry my review is so long. D:

war_n_peace February 26 2007, 01:58:41 UTC

it is not too long!! omg what are you talking about?? I'm soo glad you liked it, I can't believe you liked it, so on and so forth, honestly.

Inui is so much fun to torture, isn't he? Poor thing. XD

and. and. I don't know what else to say, hee. again, glad it was a little fun! ^^

rancidmelody February 26 2007, 05:23:14 UTC

AINSICOOKIE!

Oh, well, Jaz's comment completely pwns anything I could come up with, but. but.

sjdkafjdkflaj;dfkjahjdkal

I TOLD YOU YOU WERE A GOOD WRITER. DID I NOT TELL YOU? I DID. I TOLD YOU, AND YOU WERE A FOOL IF YOU EVER DOUBTED ME, YOU SILLY, SILLY COOKIE.

*dies*

it is MADE OF SQUEE. MADE OF IT.

looooooooove
Mellow

war_n_peace February 26 2007, 06:08:23 UTC

I STILL DON'T THINK IT'S THAT GOOD BUT I'M NOT GETTING ANYWHERE WITH PROTESTING, AM I?

thank you!! <33

and please, no silly dying after something *I* wrote, honestly =P

rancidmelody February 27 2007, 04:21:18 UTC

I WILL DIE AFTER WHATEVER I PLEASE. I DO WHAT I WANT.

oshimei February 26 2007, 06:00:29 UTC

eeee!! ^^ I love iiiit : D I love how it was a story responce, haha, I loooved the two different perspectives, yaaaay *nuzzles it*... and about that cupcake icon...*glomp, hump*

war_n_peace February 26 2007, 06:06:03 UTC

ignore my warning will you?? *sigh* ah well. ^^

WATCH PRINCE OF TENNIS. FOR SERIOUS.

cupcakes love you too! XD

oshimei February 26 2007, 21:28:10 UTC

course I ignore warnings : D besides I read the original too, I'm oriented D:<
yessum, I need to watch see read *nod, sniffle* PERO YO NO TENGO y necesito tiempo..grr...haha, whip out your translator, do it

oo, that's one hawt translator

CUPCAAAAAKES : DDDDD I looove cupaes to no end.. I'm seeing if I'm sensitive to gluten tho, so I can't have any D:

war_n_peace February 28 2007, 05:39:01 UTC

hahaha well fine but don't say I didn't warn you when you don't see the "bridge out" sign or whatever. XD

haha spanish isn't that far from french/english in this case you know. so... *whips out "translator"* haha.

i make you gluten free cupcakes?? although taste wise I am skeptical. >

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sivullinen February 26 2007, 07:00:18 UTC

Of course, a bench gets in your way, but as soon as you get past it you’re outside, and your face might as well be on fire as you sprint all the way home.

I think this was really good story-telling! No "you stumble on a bench", but a more circumventing way of saying it.

“I…mighthavekissedMomoshirointheclubroom.”

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Aaand... pretty much after that I stopped having any thoughts altogether except 'ASDKASDLANDAK' and 'GAAAAAAAAAAAH' and 'LOOOVVVVVVVEEEEEEE' and 'OMGOMGOMGHOT' and 'PERFECTION'.

You’re doing quite well, indeed.

your list of People. To. Avoid.

What can I say? LOVEOMGSOMUCHLOVE. ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

You must post this to comms, please? IT'S SO WONDERFUL.

AND WRITE MORE PLZ. ♥

war_n_peace February 26 2007, 07:30:25 UTC

hee, taking french has gotten me a lot better at circumlocution, whee XD

thank you! <33 omg, I still can't believe you guys like this, I don't know what to say... XP

comms??? what?? O.O

I sorta do have something else I'm working on but midterms! gahh

sivullinen February 26 2007, 12:46:32 UTC

comms??? what?? O.O
Yeah, you should totally pimp it on momo_kai or something if you haven't already :)