Fanfic: Pokemon: Gaining from Loss - Chapter 8

[vulpixi_misa]

[Gaining From Loss] - Chapter 8 (Final)
Length: Chapter - Complete
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Adventure/Romance
Warning(s): BL, Swearing
Character(s): Ash, Paul, others
Pairing(s): Paul x Ash
Summary: After thrown into certain situations, Ash and Paul must work together to get back what was lost and make it out alive.
Author's Notes: This is the

Comments

[zin0]

MISAAAAAAAA!!!!!!! OHMYGOOOOD YOU FINISHED IT!! You could have warned me a little i almost had a heart attack this morning when I saw what you had posted (and then ofc was late for school because there was NO WAY i was gonna wait any longer before reading this)! I was just talking to Kirika yesterday how I didn't know what to offer you so you'd write coma just one more time and then this happens. I can't even begin to describe how happy i was and still am, I knew my waiting wasn't for nothing! Alright, since this is probably my favorite multichapter comafic I am going to comment the whole fic now that it's finished, because my earlier comments from years ago are awful and short

[zin0]

What I probably like the most in your Paul (ok i like all the things when it comes your paul) is the way he shows his kindness. Like little things - Ash is hungry - Paul gets him some apples, but in a way that still seems like he's pissed off because of Ash. But again, he still acts nice, and no matter how hard he tries to act like Ash is just a total burden, he still finds himself helping his rival all the time. (Yeeep yeep so he needed Ash's help as well because no pokemon with him BUT STILL he could be colder if he wanted, but he isn't!) Aaaand I like how Ash is still a but bummed he has to hang out with Paul of all people, and not see this as a 100% opportunity to befriend his rival or something. AND I ADORE when Ash is left speechless when Paul shows him some kindness (apple scene for example), like he's just stunned the other can actually be nice on his own way (also it's kinda sad that Ash thinks that Paul never shows him any kindness, I mean yeah I get why he thinks so, but still).

Paul is Paul, no matter what you’re going

[zin0]

“Don’t let go.” Paul muttered.

Ash thought he meant “don’t let go of your breath” but then the grip on his wrist slid down to his hand and suddenly he felt horrible for thinking Paul would betray him.

THAT PART OHGODDD. the "don't let go", I just HNGDKFSDLSKDJKF SERISOULSY HNGGGG. I guess part of that part's impact is the fact that Paul's been pretty unsocial with Ash so far and then suddenly he's holding his hand and telling him not to let go. Also I feel like this kinda the turning point, where Ash stops thinking Paul is ... eeh what's the word again... well "bad" guy and starts seeing that he can actually be nice. Anyway, this whole end to the fourth chapter is awesome and I send you million kilos of cookies for writing it!!!

Ash didn’t notice until now that their hands were still clasp together. He felt a little thump in the back of his heart but he just figured it was from the adrenaline of being chased and escaping.

Continued handholding even when the danger is already over<333 And I understand Ash, if Paul was holding my

[zin0]

THEN MORE HANDHOLDING, MISAAAA MY WEAK SPOTS!!! Heheee i like how it's Paul the both times that wants to hold hands (Ash wouldn't probably dare to even suggest it). It's just so sweet!! how they say, the harder the tsun, sweeter the dere. Deffo the case here! And excuses like "you don't how to walk, hold my hand" makes it even better and PAUL NOT LOOKING AT ASH! So he doesn't think it's purely so that they can walk faster BDD HNGG ASh getting the huge dokis bc of their handholding! Yes the ending of chapter six is also one of my fav moments in this fic, because Paul's reddening ears! (uuung i am almost out of energy sorry if the comment gets crappy for now on)

alright my comment for the seventh chapter was somewhat decent so i am just gonna say that the top moments of this chapter were when a) ash finally understood paul better (that he too cared about his pokemon) b)

The Veilstone trainer shook his head from the mental image but for some reason he continued to stare at the water dripping down Ash’s tan neck. Paul swallowed the

[zin0]

My first reaction when reading the last chapter: GODDAMN COCKBLOCK DAWN AND BROCK! I WAS HOLDING MY BREATH AT THAT SCENE I WAS SURE SOME WORDS WERE GONNA BE SAID BUT THEN THE FUCKING KNOCK ON THE DOOR! Okay but anyway, beautiful end to this beautiful fic! Ash not wanting to his time with Paul to come to an end even when in the beginning he found the company rather unpleasant. And Paul too, STILL trying to convince himself that "hurdur i was only using ash i am not lonely without him", STOP THE DENIAL! It's cute how they both feel they don't want things to go back to the pre-this fic era, (even when Paul especially is STRONG with his denial) where they were JUST rivals. I have to say, now that i remember, that the name for this fic is really matching and perfect. You couldn't have picked a better one. :D oH BOY then the whole Paul-Pikachu conversation. Idk, I love when Paul talks about Ash to other persons (or pokemon) because he forgets to act as tsun as what he is when talking to Ash. And things regarding to Ash come out more gentle

[vulpixi_misa]

*SCREAMS* THIS IS THE BEST POSSIBLE THING TO WAKE UP TO??? ;w;
Oh gosh Zino I'm just- I have no words, I'm so happy that you like it that much because I was sure it was going to disappoint after so long. Ahhhhhhhhhh

I'm surprised you were able to analyze so much in these two. I love reading all of it. I wished I made Ash more capable because I know he is IRL but a part of me likes seeing him mess up around Paul, and the other part of me wants Paul to take care of him. XP

IM SORRY FOR THE COCKBLOCK. I still wasn't ready to write anything more than extreme friendship with underlying feelings. Will I ever be ready? Who knows.

Actually I decided to finally get around to posting it because I was playing your Kokoro no Fanfare. Oh man, I got serious dokis when I got to the head pat scene. >w<

[zin0]

You could never disappoint when it comes to your writing?!! (lol my analyzes! But yeah, nothing wrong with wanting to Paul take care of Ash! I want it too!!)

Aah, excellent, so the demo did do something good then! :D (Let me tell you everytime I try to come up with something that happens in Paul's route it's always like: "Oh this could be cool! ...Oh wait, Misa already wrote that." I shouldn't have put them in the forest, everything hits too close to this fic! :'D