rarepair_shorts: snape/petunia for mblfree

[verdeckt]

Author: Caecelia (verdeckt)
Recipient: mblfree
Title: Playing Messenger
Pairing: Severus/Petunia
Request: Severus/Petunia, thunderstorm
Rating: R
Word Count: 2,000
Summary: Petunia just wanted a taste.
A/N: Written for the summer 2011 wishlist fest at rarepair_shorts.

Comments

[verdeckt]

Thank you so much!!!!! I am delighted to hear that Petunia's pushiness and violence and need came across. Your comment is beautiful and thought-provoking. This:

The visceral taste of his kiss that you got across reminds me sharply of the disturbed, neglected, still lovable boys I knew in seventh grade, the way they would half-jokingly grab my sandwiches and take enormous bites out of them pretending to be bullying me when the fact was that their parents never packed them lunch, the way the leftover crusts tasted of stale cigarette smoke

is not only EXACTLY what I had hoped to convey, but a gorgeous description in its own right, one I would love to see integrated in fic someday.

His desirability. The way he heals her mouth. Even though it's to cover his tracks and to erase his shame, even though he hasn't any regard for her at all... that he heals her.

This pairing makes a whole lot of sense to me -- despite Snape's professed lack of regard for Petunia. She represents what he's trying to cut out of himself, the wound he's trying to inflict in himself. I'm so glad this came across. ♥