Comments | verdeckt: rarepair_shorts: snape/petunia for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/mblfree">mblfree</a></strong>

verdeckt

rarepair_shorts: snape/petunia for mblfree

Jul 19, 2011 12:02

Author: Caecelia (verdeckt)
Recipient: mblfree
Title: Playing Messenger
Pairing: Severus/Petunia
Request: Severus/Petunia, thunderstorm
Rating: R
Word Count: 2,000
Summary: Petunia just wanted a taste.
A/N: Written for the summer 2011 wishlist fest at rarepair_shorts.

( playing messenger )

fic: playing messenger, pairing: snape/petunia, my_fic

Comments 16

astopperindeath July 24 2011, 20:19:43 UTC

was sent over here by pale_moonlight. this is absolutely stunning. so in character... so *real*. well done!

verdeckt July 31 2011, 20:14:11 UTC

Thank you so much for this lovely comment! My apologies for the time it took me to respond; LJ never notified me of your comment.

astopperindeath July 31 2011, 20:57:56 UTC

no worries. :)

drinkingcocoa August 1 2011, 00:22:39 UTC

Bowing down.

That was...perfect.

Sexual violence from Petunia!!!! Of course! Pushing her advantage!

*worshiping some more*

The visceral taste of his kiss that you got across reminds me sharply of the disturbed, neglected, still lovable boys I knew in seventh grade, the way they would half-jokingly grab my sandwiches and take enormous bites out of them pretending to be bullying me when the fact was that their parents never packed them lunch, the way the leftover crusts tasted of stale cigarette smoke.

His desirability. The way he heals her mouth. Even though it's to cover his tracks and to erase his shame, even though he hasn't any regard for her at all... that he heals her.

Here via astopperindeath's rec. So glad I read.

verdeckt August 1 2011, 15:26:16 UTC

Thank you so much!!!!! I am delighted to hear that Petunia's pushiness and violence and need came across. Your comment is beautiful and thought-provoking. This:

The visceral taste of his kiss that you got across reminds me sharply of the disturbed, neglected, still lovable boys I knew in seventh grade, the way they would half-jokingly grab my sandwiches and take enormous bites out of them pretending to be bullying me when the fact was that their parents never packed them lunch, the way the leftover crusts tasted of stale cigarette smoke

is not only EXACTLY what I had hoped to convey, but a gorgeous description in its own right, one I would love to see integrated in fic someday.

His desirability. The way he heals her mouth. Even though it's to cover his tracks and to erase his shame, even though he hasn't any regard for her at all... that he heals her.This pairing makes a whole lot of sense to me -- despite Snape's professed lack of regard for Petunia. She represents what he's trying to cut out of himself, the wound he's trying to ( ... )