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Undesirable: Chapter 9

Dec 02, 2008 08:55

TITLE: Undesirable (A vampire novel)
RATING: NC-17 (This chapter NC-17)
GENRE: Porn with plot -- heavy on the plot. Action/adventure, some black humor, some romance.
PAIRINGS: George x everyone. Mostly Slash, some het, three and moresomes. Vampire sex.
WARNINGS: (this chapter) Some violence, non-con.
WORD COUNT: 5954

( Chapter 9 )

original, undesirable

Comments 19

arkanefyre December 3 2008, 02:23:10 UTC

Poor thing. He should've just stuck with Lord Fancy Pants.

Thanks for posting! Love it. <3

velvet_mace December 3 2008, 07:47:46 UTC

LOL, Well actually that's what George wants (or at least thinks he wants, he's never actually met Lord Fancy Trousers). George can't help it, it's his nature to be a pain in the butt.

watermoonj December 3 2008, 07:03:40 UTC

wow~ update!!! thanks a lot^^

I follow you fic from Adultff.net

poor George in this chapter.

But I think George'll get better patron by Nadette

She very considerate in detail.

velvet_mace December 3 2008, 07:46:11 UTC

Well, we'll see what happens with Nadette. She is a very detail oriented person, true.

George is in for a rather unpleasant time, I'm afraid.

regnet December 3 2008, 16:45:36 UTC

Ah - poor George's luggage. Hopefully we'll learn more about George's mysterious illness. Perhaps it's just lack of sleep. We get that too, as we eagerly await and receive each installment of this story. ;-)

I read this again and have concluded that, as much as I love her for detailing George's appeal, Nadette is evil. If she hangs out with those LA vamps, perhaps she is another one of those micro-managers. All those beautiful women around him, and not being able to even masturbate for a week? Thanks for revving up the story an evil notch! ;-) this orientation is looking more diabolical than Jeffrey's. Perhaps Jeffrey wasn't too bad, after all he did give George lots of pleasure. Wally's cryptic "Sorry" is such a loaded word - it's brilliant!

And we've not seen George this depressed before. That's some really good writing there. THANKS!!

regnet December 3 2008, 17:08:21 UTC

I love your voice. So I'm not sure if these are stylistics or just random typos ... just in case it helps, here they are:

You dare compare harem to slavery (a harem?)
hot prefect friction (perfect)
discipline can't combined with Service (can't be)
sleep with whoever (with whomever)

Thanks again for all your updates!

velvet_mace December 7 2008, 03:11:44 UTC

Thanks! Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you. It's been kind of crazy around here. I changed all but the first which is a case of language change. Harem is not just a thing but a state of being.

regnet December 11 2008, 06:54:40 UTC

Thanks so much for your responses. Yes, I definitely appreciate how busy you must be this season - and with your kids on vacation at home too. But, like George, I'm an eternal optimist, and I've been counting down the days to your next update. Hopefully soon... hopefully today... hopefully this hour... (you get the picture) ;-)

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velvet_mace December 7 2008, 03:12:33 UTC

Dang it! Thanks. Fixed it.

orion117 December 8 2008, 04:02:43 UTC

Poor George. He tries to plan a few moves ahead, but suddenly the board is upended and he's playing an entirely different game. His suffering makes a good read for me, though.

I'm guessing that, given George's new status as a White, it won't be long before there are a number of vampires trying to stake a claim on him. That would be fun!