The part with old Zach was amazing. I could so picture him, and poor Dean had not a glimpse of an idea what was going on. You made this bar scene really enjoyable. The next part was very confusing to me. I didn't catch on that it was Gabe 'til Castiel basically said his name (you gave enough hints, I just didn't get it) and that Castiel killed Zach (killed anyone) didn't occur to me until you spelled it out (next chapter). I could, however, picture Cas clearly. Forget you brother and be happy - *zapp* that's so him. He has this streak in him, where he either doesn't explain himself at all, or explains anything else too much, like he cannot figure out how humans' brains work and you captured his minimizing side here very well. The letters came in handy in here, too. It ties perfectly back to last chapter.
And then, finally! He finds Sammy and Dean is just about to admit to himself, that he's not looking for him to kick his ass, but get him back. The scene where he breaks into Sam's room and goes through his stuff is great. He could always find out more (what are those pills, what is on his computer), but he shies away from it, scared it might reveal something, he doesn't want to know.
The way, Sam's pushing Dean away is great. Also how you already let on, how much older Sam seems. I'm so happy, Dean figured it out quickly.
A number of readers found the Zachariah part confusing and I wonder if I could have pulled that off differently. Glad it worked in the end anyway - and that Cas's appearance worked for you.
I could, however, picture Cas clearly. Forget you brother and be happy - *zapp* that's so him. He has this streak in him, where he either doesn't explain himself at all, or explains anything else too much, like he cannot figure out how humans' brains work and you captured his minimizing side here very well.
The letters came in handy in here, too. It ties perfectly back to last chapter.
And then, finally! He finds Sammy and Dean is just about to admit to himself, that he's not looking for him to kick his ass, but get him back. The scene where he breaks into Sam's room and goes through his stuff is great. He could always find out more (what are those pills, what is on his computer), but he shies away from it, scared it might reveal something, he doesn't want to know.
The way, Sam's pushing Dean away is great. Also how you already let on, how much older Sam seems. I'm so happy, Dean figured it out quickly.
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