Comments | vail_kagami: SPN Gen Big Bang: Look Back in Anger, Chapter 2

vail_kagami

SPN Gen Big Bang: Look Back in Anger, Chapter 2

Sep 07, 2011 00:02

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( chapter 2 )

fandom: supernatural, medium: story, * story: look back in anger, bigbang

Comments 4

etrix September 8 2011, 00:19:49 UTC

On my way through this (enjoying it thoroughly, I must say), I noticed a typo:

"The wheels left a trail of rubber on the asphalt as Dean stepped on the breaks."

That should be "brakes".

Now, off to next chapter...

vail_kagami September 8 2011, 15:24:28 UTC

Fixed it! Thanks for pointing it out!

anonymous October 6 2012, 10:04:23 UTC

The part with old Zach was amazing. I could so picture him, and poor Dean had not a glimpse of an idea what was going on. You made this bar scene really enjoyable. The next part was very confusing to me. I didn't catch on that it was Gabe 'til Castiel basically said his name (you gave enough hints, I just didn't get it) and that Castiel killed Zach (killed anyone) didn't occur to me until you spelled it out (next chapter ( ... )

vail_kagami October 6 2012, 12:31:24 UTC

A number of readers found the Zachariah part confusing and I wonder if I could have pulled that off differently. Glad it worked in the end anyway - and that Cas's appearance worked for you.