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[urbancate]

The DVD Commentary Meme

Pick a passage from one of my stories, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted). I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain

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[sleepygoof8784]

Ohh Fun!

How about this section from Beer and Other Awesome Things in the Shower:

He runs. On the treadmill, he runs. And maybe it’s Queen playing on his iPod, but whatever, he hates running, and classic rock - we are the champions, I am the fucking champion - does the trick, and he does the required miles at the appropriate pace for getting neither too ripped or too flabby. It’s a fine line, right. He’d rather be surfing or banging back a beer, but this is the L.A. thing.

He hates locker room showers, however discreet the reputations, so he drives back to the apartment sweaty and uncomfortable and dying for some cool water or maybe a beer, but definitely a shower. It’s a grand, ocean-color-tiled wonder, the shower big enough to hold a party in. It will ruin all that good running, but he pops the top off a bottle as he strips on his way to the shower, anyway. The rooms are empty, because she’s still at her own gym with her own workout, probably punching the stuff out of someone or something.

[urbancate]

AHAHAHA. Oh, God. Karl running. Well, I had to find a way to get him into the shower for later in the story, right, and a treadmill seemed good enough for that job. Especially since I think working out in a gym annoys him a little bit (or a lot). The music thing - that's all me. I listen to Queen and Aerosmith and ACDC and the Beastie Boys when I'm slugging it out on the treadmill, because it's the only music that keeps me going. Also, besides being annoyed by working out in a gym, I'm also really sure that Karl doesn't much like L.A. (it's my canon, so shoot me

[sleepygoof8784]

lol. I love it. Also love the idea that he works out so that he can just ruin it all ten minutes later with a beer. Cause I see Karl as pretty fit, but 'cause he has to be not because he loves it. So I totally think he's one of those, eat/drink what you want types just be sure you work it off.

Loved that story too. :D

[izzyfics]

"She's not sleeping with him, you know," Chapel says to him, out of the blue one day.

"Excuse me, what?"

"Leah Campbell and Captain Kirk. They're not having sex."

"And you are sharing this with me why?"

She raises her eyebrow at him, which is completely unfair because he is the one who is supposed to speak in disapproving eyebrow movement.

"Do I even want to know how you know?"

"I've been assisting Dr. Garmer. I know how to read a bio-scan."

"Shit."

"You didn't hear it from me."

from Extraordinary Machine

[urbancate]

Ooh, this is such a great scene

[izzyfics]

I absolutely love your dialogue, btw. And this scene just illustrates that love.

So agree with you on the bio-scan part--of course it could tell!