Beginnings - LU:NA (4/15)

[unwritten_ideas]

Title - Beginnings - LU:NA (4/15)
Author - unwritten_ideas
Beta - write_my_dreams
Rating - eventual NC-17, this part PG-13Word Count - 4,919 (69,000ish total

Comments

[mind_cell]

Pst... pst.. can i please hide in that hotel room - i swear i won't make a noise - and watch this scene like 20 more times? Please? I promise i won't drool, either! Well, maybe just a little =P

And i must applaud for_th3_written because there's indeed no better words to describe it than "f*cking delicate".

On a serious note - I am absolutely looking forward to seeing Gackt and You in a conflict. You have shown their romantic and vulnerable sides so well, i am now eager to see how they'll behave in a more "testosterony" situation. Another thing - i am surprised that it's actually Gackt who's realised his feelings first. Based on the fact that you usually write You as the, er, active part ;), i thought he'd be the one to strive for Gackt's attention. That's a very interesting turn, and a very promising one. Argh, Saturday, come quicker!!!

And also - i hope you don't mind me pointing this out but your style and grammar are usually flawless so i couldn't help noticing that you used "bought" instead of "brought" 2 times - "for Gackt’s minivan to be bought to the back entrance" and "You got off the bed and gathered the couple of things he’d bought with him" :)

[unwritten_ideas]

There is conflict later on... of course there is. It's 15 parts long, there has to be conflict somewhere otherwise it's going to get really boring XD

It's always You who does the chasing and realises things first. I thought it'd be fun to switch it up a little. Let's see how Gackt handles it, hmm?

Ohh, neither me or my beta noticed the bought/brought thing. Oops.

[mind_cell]

I am sure there'll be conflicts, but i am also very curious to see how G and You will handle them... and how you'll handle G and You handling them, too ;)
One more day till Saturday!