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kappamaki33 Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this
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This fic was for taragel who'd asked me to write friendship fic about Tyrol and Kara. But the more I thought about it, the less I knew why they liked each other. So I decided to write fic about why they like each other. Hence, the fic starts with a scene where they like each other a minimal amount.
I had huge problems writing Kara's flippancy because imitating speech patterns I'm unfamiliar with is very hard for me in English. I feel like there are way better quips Kara could have made in the scene.
Tyrol often reminds me of Gaeta. He does so here, too. He has the subordinate officer deadpan down, too, except he's calmer and more accepting about it than Gaeta.
I like Kara having the grace of a cat. Because she does. :)
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“Yes, it is,” Karl said. “I’m going to flight school on Caprica.”
“We can’t afford...”
“Don’t worry about it,” he interrupted her. “I’ll make do. And as soon as I can, I’ll send money home for all of you. Pilots make lots and lots of money.”
She smiled, leaning into his touch with a sigh when he caressed her cheek. For a moment, her eyes unfocussed, finally resting on the paper in his hand.
“Is that your acceptance letter?” she asked.
Karl tried to smile.
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I think that one of the first drabbles in your series was about Helo as a stripper. That was sad too, that he's basically selling images of his body for money.
You made me think a lot more about Helo than I ever did. And I agree, it's interesting that maybe he didn't love to fly. But he's serious and committed and made it his career anyway. I miss his story in your hands. :-)
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He decides for an experiment ( ... )
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Your plotbunny really deserves attention, because that story would be both interesting and fresh. There's a lot of manipulative, lying, cheating Baltar out there. I haven't seen fics portraying him as sincerely in love and trying to protect Gaeta fics.
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Really? How would you have written that remix?
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Dear Mr. Gaeta,
thank you so much for the letter you sent me in March. I was sure I’d flunk trig but thanks to you, the test was no problem at all. Your explanations are so amazing and thorough. A lot of cadets are good at math but I think I’m the only one who can calculate a jump in her head! Remember when I was ten and you moved in next door? Back then, I sure wouldn’t have thought that I could be an officer one day.
I'm particularly curious about how you thought up the idea for this ten-year-old girl and about what convinced Gaeta to be a mentor to her?
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I can count on one hand the number of OCs I've written so far in my fanfic life, and I think I mostly don't because you're right, they are quite the challenge and they can easily become an indulgence for the author that no one else cares about. Plus, they can be all this extra thinky work ;) which I don't necessarily mind, but sometimes it just doesn't seem all that worth it.
However, I like what you said about OCs being good for describing characters from the outside. This OC really shone through and seemed real, yet what she really did that was cool was tell us something new about Gaeta. We've never seen him be a mentor, or for that matter, a cranky old man, and that's really what made this snippet so intriguing and dear to my heart - imagining the slow relationship that must have developed between this spunky little girl and this tired, old soldier. It's a wonderfully economic way to tell this story too. I think you were right not to overthink her. I probably would have.
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