This is the turning point.

[travelsick]

Hirona now felt the rain. Again, it fell in portions. The constant tapping was a symphony, movements directing the downpour. She walked slowly nonetheless. She was startled out of her thoughts by the loud crash of a pipe organ. It slammed with fury inside a church. The moonlight reflected off the windows, the painted on gods shimmering. The rain

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[anonymitysmith]

Dear “Someone Without Your Qualities”,

Having read your comment, I have taken the liberty of correcting your terrible spelling and use of grammar. Unfortunately, your style is beyond reconciliation. Nevertheless, please find your comment re-posted below, corrected in accordance with current Turabian standards.

--Taylor V. Smith

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Are you aware of the semi-colon? It is a brilliant conception. I suggest you employ it; it'll be worth your while.

Your writing tastes like loose soil swallowed intermittently.

Here is your writing symbolically reconstructed in two sentences, you shameless egoist: who is my main character? (crash) It is a girl. (crash)

Word of advice: when you go swimming, don't breathe under water; you'll choke. Just open your eyes.

How old are you? I guarantee you're my senior by at least five years. If you're published, our country has good reason to fight.

exeunt

insincerely,
-someone without your qualities
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Writing reflects more about a person than perhaps any other form of communication. Poor grammar usage and spelling, as you exhibit, usually denotes a person of lesser intelligence. If you would to contend that this description does not fit you, you might try brushing up on your English.

--Taylor V. Smith

[accurately]

That is exactly what I was thinking.

[anonymitysmith]

are you aware of the semi-colon? it is a brilliant conception, device; I suggest you employ it; it'll be worth your while; your writing tastes like loose soil swallowed intermittently. (useful? yes, to explain my point. on and on and on...)

(purposely repeated)

here is your writing, symbolically reconstructed in two sentences, you shameless egoist:
Who is my main character? (crash) It is a girl. (crash)

Word of advice: When you go swimming, don't breath under water, you'll choke. (goes on and on and on...) BREAK

Just open your eyes.

How old are you? I guarantee you're my senior by at least five years. If you're published our country has good reason to fight. (on and on and on)
exeunt

insincerely, (insincerely)

-someone without your qualities

[anonymitysmith]

& hey man it's not so nice to tell mee I'm auful with my english! breathe and soak in .breathe! take two fine breaths and etc.

I've taken the liberty to correct your notes, and will right myself rather than sport my compunction. Nothing is what it is not. But I'm not insulting this boy (man), whoever he is (might be).

Instead of driving a stick shift, he might have offered fluency, volubility- anything to direct his unreadable prose. This is a suggestion, of course.