he's not superman he must be farmer's boypregnantcigarMay 25 2010, 18:53:56 UTC
this starts so quietly and keeps that tone throughout. such a contrast from rodiy's 'morn pittens' (kekeke) :3 i read very very slowly because every word felt valuable. the idea of hyuk watching hae from under the tree is too sweet, too urghfhalf-inducing. i loved the underlying sense of inadequacy coupled with his genuine fascination for hae. the brief line about his mother was startlingly touching. it's amazing that you hid an entire back story in between the lines.
"stubborn weed" is probably my favorite phrase out of this story, because it summarizes them so well. i think we've talked about this before, how we wanted skinny adolescent hyukhae blossoming into manry men hyukhae (and 3. even though that was before we saw just how manry they were!!!! oh 4jib) because that evolution is so integral to their friendship and them (in my mind). hae flinging himself down beside hyuk and stealing his book is something i can well imagine lol.
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♥ I'm really glad you liked this! ;~; I like that you caught most of what I was trying to get across while trying to keep the word count within an acceptable diversion from 300 haha.
Blossoming hyukhae! I vaguely remember talking about it too. Haha I'm glad Donghae is at least somewhat in character... I had a bit of trouble with characterization writing this, probably bc I was using second person, which I normally use for original writing. Like the character normally seems to have a voice too much like myself to use in fanfiction, haha.
This is actually the first thing I finished and posted after I had this sudden realization about my writing and I don't know, I'm just really really happy that you liked it, because when I finished it, I felt almost proud haha. That being said, when I read over it now, I'm spotting things I would've changed, buuuut yes. 8)
wow, what a fabulousy story. very mellow and introspective. I really got the feeling of not only the farm, but Haehyuk's relationship through your descriptions and set up.
The imagry and word usage is BEAUTIFUL! and then end was--zomg--so good ^.^ I now feel very relaxed and happy!
I'd hoped that I could get that feeling of the farm across in my writing, so I'm glad you mentioned that :) yay relaxation~ thanks so much for the lovely comment!!
j00z suck. Didn't I request for all of you to have equally lame fic so that when Diana saw mine she wouldn't go GTFO no friend of mine? But then, you went and came out with this! A totally NON lame fic about farmboys and bookworms.
I really like the way you put so much detail so few lines like the "the gnarled whorl of old roots" and "the skin of his forearms and the back of his neck was so brown it looked like it would burn under your touch."
There's just something so incredibly...tranquil about, "'Donghae. Lee Donghae.' Like the sea?" and something about "The slick movement of his mouth tasted of rain, and all you could hear was the wind." makes me think of flying.
Nuuuuuuuuuu... to be fair, I had a hard time trying to make this anything but uber descriptive... but I figured crack will never be my thing and I should stick to what I know haha. And whatchu talkin bout, what was lame about yours? It was ridic cute. MITTENS! 8))))
Thank you ♥ your comment about the flying made me think more about what I'd really just written and... yeah, I love thinking about my own writing in a different way and sometimes (like now) it can make even more sense than when I'd written it. :)
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"stubborn weed" is probably my favorite phrase out of this story, because it summarizes them so well. i think we've talked about this before, how we wanted skinny adolescent hyukhae blossoming into manry men hyukhae (and 3. even though that was before we saw just how manry they were!!!! oh 4jib) because that evolution is so integral to their friendship and them (in my mind). hae flinging himself down beside hyuk and stealing his book is something i can well imagine lol.
he'd squared his fingers to form a frame, squinting and swinging his outstretched arms to the ( ... )
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Blossoming hyukhae! I vaguely remember talking about it too. Haha I'm glad Donghae is at least somewhat in character... I had a bit of trouble with characterization writing this, probably bc I was using second person, which I normally use for original writing. Like the character normally seems to have a voice too much like myself to use in fanfiction, haha.
This is actually the first thing I finished and posted after I had this sudden realization about my writing and I don't know, I'm just really really happy that you liked it, because when I finished it, I felt almost proud haha. That being said, when I read over it now, I'm spotting things I would've changed, buuuut yes. 8)
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The imagry and word usage is BEAUTIFUL! and then end was--zomg--so good ^.^ I now feel very relaxed and happy!
wonderful amazing GREAT! job! ^.^ I loved it
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I really like the way you put so much detail so few lines like the "the gnarled whorl of old roots" and "the skin of his forearms and the back of his neck was so brown it looked like it would burn under your touch."
There's just something so incredibly...tranquil about, "'Donghae. Lee Donghae.' Like the sea?" and something about "The slick movement of his mouth tasted of rain, and all you could hear was the wind." makes me think of flying.
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and lol yours was NOT LAME it was the cutest hyukhae i'd read since forever *____*
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Thank you ♥ your comment about the flying made me think more about what I'd really just written and... yeah, I love thinking about my own writing in a different way and sometimes (like now) it can make even more sense than when I'd written it. :)
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