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Fic: Heart of a Stone (Clark/Bruce) (Prelude) (WIP)

Aug 06, 2007 12:58

Title: Heart of a Stone
Fandom: DCU
Pairing: Superman/Batman
Rating: Adult
Status: WIP
Warnings: Slash, explicit m/m sex
Tags: Plot-intensive; Angst

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ship: superman/batman, fic: heart of a stone, fanfic

Comments 28

greeneyelove August 6 2007, 17:21:21 UTC

*squeel*

I have been WAITING for this! So very very happy. You've made Monday a good thing, my friend.

Love the set up, the family vibe, the idea of kids being raised by those two.

More? Soon?

*you've created the monster, now you have to feed it*

tmelange August 6 2007, 19:18:05 UTC

Slowly but surely, everything shall be finished! :)

Thanks for reading and commenting, Lisa. This part was actually more fun than I thought it would be. I felt like I was writing an elseworlds. LOL

schala_kid August 6 2007, 18:33:51 UTC

First of all yay Legion! I love the legion! Will we be seeing them in other chapter installments in the future?

And I love the fact that they have kids, but their son mentioned brothers and sisters...How many did they have? O_o

Every child wants to be the center of his parent's universe, but his siblings had to learn to accept-each in his or her own way-that the center of the universe for each parent was the other, and everyone else was a satellite. A well-loved satellite, but still.

That sucks...I just hope it's just Jr (or whatever his name is lol) thinking that and not being entirely true.

As always nice updates :).

tmelange August 6 2007, 19:12:51 UTC

Hey Gabs ( ... )

cathedral_junki August 6 2007, 19:30:09 UTC

WONDERFUL. Oh and you give us hope for the future. It's not all red K and lost love. And engagments to Lois. :) Looking forward to more. Only one more helpful comment, it is, at times, difficult to tell who's speaking at the start, which you may or may not have intended.

tmelange August 6 2007, 19:47:47 UTC

Thanks, dear!

>.Only one more helpful comment, it is, at times, difficult to tell who's speaking at the start, which you may or may not have intended.

I did so intend. LOL This is completely from one perspective, and so far inside the one perspective that I didn't want him thinking of either Bruce or Clark as anything other than Dad. Of course, that works fine if you have a mom and a dad, but in a scene with three guys and two dads, it gets confusing. But I didn't want to make any concessions in this part -- because if you read it carefully you can figure it out, and I didn't want to reveal the kid's name. Basically, this is not a true third person narrative; it's a first person narrow pov written in third person verb tense.

Thanks for reading and commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite the confusion. ;)

cathedral_junki August 6 2007, 22:18:42 UTC

it was much easier when i went back and read it for a second time. ^__~

tmelange August 7 2007, 14:30:41 UTC

LOL, I'm glad. :)

LOOKS LIKE IT'S GOING TO BE A BRILLIANT STORY asm613 August 6 2007, 23:30:35 UTC

Great beginning of a new story. definitely makes me want to continue reading (but really wishes it was complete so i could read the whole thing now). i have always enjoyed your stories though, so no big surprise. i'm glad bruce & clark continue to live long and happy lives into the far future. wonder why the legion would assist in letting them outlive their natural lifespan by so much- thought they were pretty adamant about not using time travel to change natural outcomes in time line. ripple affects, paradoxes, unknown consequences.. When you wrote that clark & bruce now looked so similar & bruce always sunning & how all the kids looked like their parents- thought maybe clark enhanced bruce with kryptonian dna (thus his love/need for sun and long life). their children could have been made like superboy (combining clark's & bruce's dna & growing children in artifical/kryptonian tech wombs)- which would also let children live longer w/o aging after maturing to healthy, young adult age. i'm pretty sure they wouldn't want their children ( ... )

Re: LOOKS LIKE IT'S GOING TO BE A BRILLIANT STORY tmelange August 7 2007, 16:22:01 UTC

>>Great beginning of a new story. definitely makes me want to continue reading (but really wishes it was complete so i could read the whole thing now ( ... )

Re: LOOKS LIKE IT'S GOING TO BE A BRILLIANT STORY tmelange August 7 2007, 16:22:52 UTC

Continued ( ... )

carolandtom August 6 2007, 23:37:31 UTC

This is an awesome start! I'm really excited about this new fic. I already love the premise. Can't wait to read more of this intriguing story.

tmelange August 7 2007, 14:42:44 UTC

I hope I don't disappoint you, C. You know this is only the future flash forward bit that I've been doing with this series. The main part of the story picks up after Pas de Deux.

Thanks for reading and for commenting, Carol! I know this part was a little confusing with the lack of names and all, so I'm glad you were able to enjoy it. :)

carolandtom August 7 2007, 17:25:27 UTC

I know this part was a little confusing with the lack of names and all

I just read it a couple of times and understood it very well. I too like those challenges, so I can understand your choice and I didn't mind, in fact I really liked it!