FIC: Thou Wilt Quake For This (8/9)

[tkel_paris]

Title: Thou Wilt Quake For This
Genre: Much Ado About Nothing
Rating: T (except for the DVD extra)
Author: tkel_paris
Summary: Benedick and Beatrice have found themselves forced to marry. While their family and friends are determined to make them fall in love, a chance emerges to expose the villains who trapped them. Can they succeed and protect Hero?

Comments

[inward_audacity]

Woo-hoo! I read all three chapters at once and it was awesome :D

First of all, I feel so bad for Beatrice. It's bad enough that she's being forced into this marriage and it's only made worse that she can't wear the dress she really wanted to. Poor girl.

Secondly, angry and forceful Benedick is really hot. I liked it when he got physical with the villains. They deserved it. But Dogberry and Verges are exhausting.

I can't wait for the next chapter :D

Also, I love Weird Al's Word Crimes. It's awesome.

[tkel_paris]

Cool! Anything about the earlier chapters catch your attention? :)

Unpleasant reality of the "shame" importance in society. She's not considered pure anymore, and therefore can't wear white. And worse, it's her mother's dress she was denied the chance to wear. :(

Yes, he is when he's angry, isn't he? :DDDDD Well, the Watch isn't much better. But at least they don't go to Dogberry or Verges' level. Hence my choice for the "music" for this chapter. Too fitting, I thought.

I might go ahead and post it later tonight. Depends on a lot of things. :D

[inward_audacity]

For the other chapters, I love how you incorporate their desire for each other distracting them a little from their mission. They have to constantly keep their emotions in check so they don't screw up. It's very realistic and so well written.

I also love that Maria steps up to defend Beatrice. As strong as our dear girl is, she needs someone to help her out every once in a while. And I love that it is Maria who stands up for her.

“Call yourselves her friends?! What need anyone for enemies when their own family takes pleasure in their discomfort, doth not help them out when they are trapped by accident or by design?”

This is by far my favourite line because Maria has been so quiet throughout the story. I now know where Bruno gets his wit and loyalty from.

Now on to chapter 9!! I'm so excited! Thank you for posting it!

[tkel_paris]

*squees* Yes, their emotions. I loved that detail about the play, and it totally worked with my idea. :D

Maria totally kicked butt in this chapter, didn't she? It dawned on me while I was working on this chapter that no one had really stepped forward to defend Beatrice other than Benedick, and since I had made Maria Beatrice's waiting gentlewoman in my last fic it seemed fitting to repeat the role here.

Yes, I am proud of that. A servant normally doesn't speak out of turn, but she would feel provoked and rightly so. I imagine she's fiercely loyal to Beatrice, and her child picked up on that. (Something in the play made me think that the Boy was Maria's child, and that stuck with all of my MAAN stories.)

Welcome! :D

[sykira]

If you have more you can post tonight I am willing to trade…what would work best to persuade you???? Cause I NEEED more!!!! NEEEEEEEED!!!! *grabbby hands

[tkel_paris]

*sighs* A comment on Chapter 6, which NO ONE has commented on yet? Yes, I'll post more anyway. But I wanna see more comments before you get the DVD extra, love. ;)

If the Prince's word couldn't halt the shame, I fear Benedick couldn't alter that either. :( But... wait. Just wait... It'll be worth it.

Innogen endeared herself to me after tossing the champagne in Claudio's face and using those lines of Antonio's to such effect. I think it was a greater insult coming from a woman than an old man.

*off to post Chapter Nine*

[sykira]

Oops did I not comment on a chapter??? *shame faced* will fix that of course, just reading too eagerly! (autocorrect wanted to correct my misspelling of eagerly to "bargirl" ahem, which might not be too inaccurate, lol, not that I've been over the door, just me and the lemonade!)

I was gonna bribe you with my own utterly jossed DVD extra if ya wanted, even though it fits not remotely with your story, nor is complete, and is more emo than smutty in true hopeless Sykira fashion, but comments, comments are easier! *runs off to find ch 6*

[tkel_paris]

Excitement over a fanfic is not unknown to me. I've nearly missed commenting on a few of yours because of that. :) ("Bargirl"?! Spellcheck does weird things sometimes. Although nothing is weirder than the autofill on my smartphone.)

*perks* MAAN fic? From sykira? *gives Puss in Boots eyes* Oh, wait. You said it's unfinished? Would you like help finishing it...?