[#62] One Hour Fic Challenge

[tinyangl]

...I don't even know. I wasn't even really in the mood to write, but I fought through it because I haven't been writing recently. ...Which brought about this load of whatever that can't even be called crap because it's that bad.

Cigarette
Pin, PG, 788 words
A/N: Written for the One Hour Fic Challenge with absolutely no porn here. Based on Jin's

Comments

[cynicalism]

I want to HIT you right now. ://// Because I only wish my "that bad" written in under an hour--while I wasn't even in the mood to write looked like this. I love the first paragraph, Jin's nervous frantic chain of thoughts that totally matches the imagery of a suddenly empty box and how did that happen, indeed? And also, I just love this likne for some reason:

"Don't forget to breathe," Yamapi says suddenly.
Speaks levels really. And this was a lovely insight into their friendship.

...:hits: >(

[tinyangl]

YOU ARE SO BIASED THAT IT'S NOT EVEN FUNNY. ;alsdkjf;alskdjf I sincerely don't know what you see.

And because we're going to have this argument repeatedly, I'm going to focus on blaming you for me STILL watching Digimon right now.

[cynicalism]

I see you in my eyes. ♥♥♥♥♥ AAHAHHAHA o even i can't help but laugh at that

ROFLLL. only 30 episodes to go! 8Db you're making me wanna rewatch too. :/// am watching veronica mars myself, actually.

[tinyangl]

....LOLOL You are SO lame. ♥♥♥

VERONICA MARS. A;LSKDFJA;LSJFKLASDF I LOVE THAT SHOW. Well, first season was the best, the others weren't really... a good follow-up. BUT ALS;KDFJASLKDJFLKAJSDF FIRST SEASON. What episode are you watching? :DDDD

[goldengutgirl]

how so good without porn. God reading this made me wish that I smoked yoo. Lol. <3333333

[tinyangl]

Awwww, thank you!!!! lol I do not smoke so idk if my portrayal was even good, but thank you~

[tinyangl]

Awww!!! THANK YOU THANK YOU. :DDDDD That is so nice of you~~~ Friendship fics are so made of win, imo. :DDD

[autumnjaide]

I really enjoyed this and you are amazing to have something like that written in an hour. There was this melancholy feeling coming off it in waves. Just.. *sighs* ..sorta feeling? ^^; Haha sorry if I don't make sense.

I think I really win out when you guys do these challenges. :D ♥

[tinyangl]

Awwwww, thank you so much!!! I really like these challenges myself, even if I'm totally frantic while participating. But all the FIC that I read afterwards. *________________*

[anamuan]

.....'it's that bad' meaning, one of my favourite things you've written ever? and i morally protest smoking. This is. this is. i can't even figure out how to describe how much i love this. it's got such a beautiful form. there's this kind of nothing conversation and it's like. it's like a background. like music you have to have on. I love the thematic repetition of 'inhale' and 'exhale;' and it's weird, because it's like. on the one hand, the repetition is soothing, because repetition can be, and in this case in particular, it's iconic of the act of smoking--it's supposed to calm you down. But on the other hand, repetition is a device that can be used to build up tension, and it does here. you've given it this edge of desperation (probably because the words repeat, but it's not always jin who's getting that hit) as well, and it's really very compelling

[anamuan]

jk;fajkl;fajkl;;jklafjl;kaf this comment really makes no sense. i'm sorry.

[tinyangl]

a;slkdfja;lskdfj This comment just makes me beam so hard, nikki. I heart you so much. a;lkfjasl;kfjalsdf I totally think you analyzed it MUCH MORE than I put thought into it, because beyond the repetition and how I wanted to kinda make it airy....I had NONE of that. So you are just amazing for reading into it. a;ldkfasl;dfjalskdjf

HAVE I TOLD YOU LATELY THAT I LOVE YOU~~~

[anamuan]

THEN YOU ARE A GENIUS FOR YOUR ABILITY TO DO BEAUTIFUL THINGS INSTINCTIVELY.

you did a bit ago over chat. i don't mind hearing it again.