Frustration Builds
So, I've got this problem.
I've put in probably 20 hours on a verse. Just one fucking verse. It has guitar, and it has vocals, and it has nothing else. No bass, no drums, no kazoo, no banjo, fucking NOTHING else. Just those two elements. And for whatever reason? I can't make it not suck.
I'm drawing on elements of Denali's second album and Eddie Vedder's solo work in order to invoke a sense of intimacy and spaciness. I'm trying to "paint" with the harmony of notes, or the dissonance (there is a recurring minor 2nd in the guitar part) when it happens. There needs to be a push and pull of the emotions in the part, but there also needs to be a narrative. Instead of getting from point A to point B, it sounds to me like I'm just throwing words and notes at the part so that I can get to the rest of the song, instead of actually writing something that belongs there.
I've been through so many iterations of it that I'm embarrassed to be in my own company with this song NOT done. It's one fucking verse. I understand the lyrical idea, I understand what I want out of it, I just can't get it there.
I'm back to work on it in six hours, wish me luck.
I've put in probably 20 hours on a verse. Just one fucking verse. It has guitar, and it has vocals, and it has nothing else. No bass, no drums, no kazoo, no banjo, fucking NOTHING else. Just those two elements. And for whatever reason? I can't make it not suck.
I'm drawing on elements of Denali's second album and Eddie Vedder's solo work in order to invoke a sense of intimacy and spaciness. I'm trying to "paint" with the harmony of notes, or the dissonance (there is a recurring minor 2nd in the guitar part) when it happens. There needs to be a push and pull of the emotions in the part, but there also needs to be a narrative. Instead of getting from point A to point B, it sounds to me like I'm just throwing words and notes at the part so that I can get to the rest of the song, instead of actually writing something that belongs there.
I've been through so many iterations of it that I'm embarrassed to be in my own company with this song NOT done. It's one fucking verse. I understand the lyrical idea, I understand what I want out of it, I just can't get it there.
I'm back to work on it in six hours, wish me luck.