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From Eng-11 H:
Critique this paragraph:
There is nothing more delicious than a butterscotch sundae. It's good taste, plus the easiness of it's preparation, establishes this sundae as one of the premier deserts. To start, four large scoops of vanilla ice cream should be placed in a bowl. Next, butterscotch sauce should be poured over the ice cream. It is imperative that all of the ice cream is covered by the sauce. A perfectly ripened banana, split in ten equal sections, should then be placed on top of the ice cream. To add a finishing touch, a red cherry should be situated on the top of the creation. A butterscotch sundae looks as good as it tastes, and when you take that first bite, I'm sure you will agree with me.
I found several glaring errors that the rest of my class ignored in favor of more abstract subjective issues. Let's see how y'all do with it!
Critique this paragraph:
There is nothing more delicious than a butterscotch sundae. It's good taste, plus the easiness of it's preparation, establishes this sundae as one of the premier deserts. To start, four large scoops of vanilla ice cream should be placed in a bowl. Next, butterscotch sauce should be poured over the ice cream. It is imperative that all of the ice cream is covered by the sauce. A perfectly ripened banana, split in ten equal sections, should then be placed on top of the ice cream. To add a finishing touch, a red cherry should be situated on the top of the creation. A butterscotch sundae looks as good as it tastes, and when you take that first bite, I'm sure you will agree with me.
I found several glaring errors that the rest of my class ignored in favor of more abstract subjective issues. Let's see how y'all do with it!