Naruto Fanfiction: Written, Erased, Re-Written [ch.2]

[tellytubby101]

Written, Erased, Re-Written.

Summary: It’s not enough to capture a man. You need to be able to break him. But how can you cripple something already so damaged? AU, still in Naruto’s world, but a far cry from canon events. Eventual KakaIru.

Comments

[honzeldafitz]

I've decided I'm loving this. I'm glad Iruka is still in there (and I hate Orochimaru a little more, if that's possible). Hopefully, Kakashi will come around soon. Definitely looking forward to more. ^__^

[tellytubby101]

Iruka is definitely in there. No matter how much brainwashing there is, you cannot erase someone entirely. Actually, Sai is a good example of this: he remembers his brother of sorts in the book eventually.

Kakashi is in the classic denial stage. When faced with tragedy, that's a typical self-defense mental frame: "It's not him".

I'm glad you're enjoying. More Iruka and less ... brainwashed!Iruka coming up next!

[unjaundiced]

HO HO! *POKE* ALL BOW TO THE GLORIOUS POWER OF THE POKEAGE! *cackles like an evil genius*

The comment about T&I being the Underground completely made me think of Fight Club [though i haven't actually seen it]. Heehee the Underground vs. Root, Round 1! I love how Sai has his own agenda aside Root [and How to Make Friends: Ninja Edition? Pure win!] *poke

[tellytubby101]

Never seen Fight Club, but my guy friends have discussed it so much, I feel like I have. O__o Though the idea of "Underground" came from me being tired of writing T&I or Torture and Interrogation; and I doubt those who work at T&I would refer to it as such.

Question: what did you think of the linky-footnotes? Good or bad? Distracting?

Originally Sai's book was How To Make Friends but then I realised that there HAD to be a ninja edition for him. Haha.

In my early days, I was guilty of announcing POV shifts because the fandom did it a lot and I knew no better. Now I do. And I'm glad it feels smooth. It's actually a lot of fun to play with a lot of characters, but it's also a little more confusing: "Is that what Tsunade would say, or am I still thinking in Ibiki-mode?"

Orochimaru did the injections in the time when Iruka was captured, but not brainwashed. You see, he-- wait. Better not say. Spoilers, darling. ;-)

AGAIN YOUR NINJA EYESIGHT ASTOUNDS ME! I wondered if anyone would notice Iruka's prisoner ID number just happened to

[unjaundiced]

The only part of Fight Club I know is this really long section of commentary about duvets two of the characters have I saw somewhere that ends with "The things you own end up owning you".

Haha Laziness breeds brilliance or at least prods the bunnies to multiply. I think the footnote linkage works out great, though it'll be a pain as far as creating LJ-cuts for your footnote page if you end up with too many of them, lol. Briefly, ever so briefly, I thought of doing the same, but then my notes always get out of hand so I never bothered. You should put a note at the head of the fic about them so people don't read and say, "Link? What is this thing? *click* AHHH Where did I go!" not that I did that or anything

[tellytubby101]

Nah, I didn't want to warn for the footnotes for that reason. The idea someone clicked on it and went "WTF?" makes me laugh. Though, yeah, making LJ-cuts on that will be a bitch once it gets bigger...

Sai's edition of the book (written by Naruto, edited by Sakura) is about ten pages long, and talks about how society generally don't accept people who constantly talk about penis sizes in public. Or about comparing penis sizes. Or something of the same vein. XD

I don't like using double spaced paragraph to indicate changes (even though I prefer that in novels) because online it's not as clear as on paper. So I use page breaks. Which FFn seems to like removing. *Sigh*.

It's really a good feeling to see how flustered you are over the little hints here and there I'm dropping. Makes me roffle around happily. And wonder how else to mess with you...*Tackle-hugs you*. Of course we're on comment spam dating terms. *Beams happily*. We never broke up. Did we? Huh? Wha--don't tell me we did! How could you! Haha, nah, we're tight

[otherblood]

Amaaaaaazing. I love this. Iruka is awesome.
I don't think you're moving too fast or too slowly. I assume they're all a little younger than in the canon?
Also, one detail that bothers me just a little: Tsunade's eyes are blue? Iruka's hazel? -confused-

[tellytubby101]

Damn it, Tsunade's eyes are meant to be brown. Brain-explosion there. That, and I haven't had a good night's sleep in about a week. Sorry, and is now fixed.

However, Iruka having hazel eyes is an intentional plot point. Brown is nice, but I was bored, so I'm making him have dark hazel eyes. Essentially brown--but with green tints mixed in. Hope that doesn't bother you too much.

Your assumption was so close to being right. I was going to make everyone younger, but then I drew a rough timeline and saw I could actually work with their canon ages. I don't want this to spiral into ridiculous AU, but then again, Orochimaru taking Iruka is pretty warped in itself...

And thank you so much for commenting! *Snuggles you*.

[otherblood]

Timeline schmimeline, either way the writing is epic. The eye color doesn't particularly -bother- me, but it's just a bold move on your part, I guess!
I could totally see Iruka being taken by orochimaru to defend his kids, so to my fangirly mind,it's realistic. the fact that it's loaded with angst and trauma makes it all the better. -swears Iruka is her favorite-
2:30am.. time fer bed!

[tellytubby101]

When I'm done (which may be far, far away) I might post the timeline. Though I'll have to neaten it up. There are a lot of odd scribbles that I can't remember what they mean. Damned shorthand at five in the morning. =.=

"Bold"? Wow, never thought about it like that before. *Suddenly anxious*. Haha, I can't see Iruka's eye-colour turning into a huge matter of debate, so I'm not too concerned...

And Iruka is my favourite, too. :DD

[caeseria]

I'm really enjoying this and I can't wait to see what happens next! And as for pacing, I think it is perfect ;)

[tellytubby101]

I adore your icon. So frickin' adorable.

Anyway, thank you for reviewing, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. And pacing was worrying me, but I'm glad people are fine with it. :DD

[gingitsune32]

Gawk!!!!! I wanna kill Kakashi for giving up on Iruka just because Iruka is not what he wants/remembers. :( Can't wait to read more.

[tellytubby101]

Yeah, Kakashi is sooo in denial. But you'll see why he's so reluctant to see Iruka as a prisoner soon...

Glad you're eager for more~! I'll try to get another chapter up asap.