Comments | tasha_elizabeth: Fic- Fighter

tasha_elizabeth

Fic- Fighter

Jul 02, 2007 16:14

Title: Fighter

He’s outside. He’s walking through the parking lot on a beautiful fall morning when, suddenly, the world falls away. Everything goes white. Pure, aching, blinding white.

He swims in the white a moment as it fades. Fades to grey. Fades to black.

And then he hears the loudest noise he’s ever heard.
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fic, fandom: house

Comments 23

drunken_hedghog July 2 2007, 22:46:14 UTC

I'm genuinely speechless. This was, I don't know. I over-use the word amazing but here I am, sitting in amazement at this fic. Somehow I completely believed it when you started writing about an apocalypse. I swear, you could write about House getting a sex-change and I'd believe it. I wish I knew how you did that.

tasha_elizabeth July 4 2007, 18:03:44 UTC

Sex-change, huh? I might consider that.

lostwiginity December 27 2007, 21:59:45 UTC

Sex-change, huh? I might consider that.
Yay!

housepiglet July 3 2007, 07:03:59 UTC

I have no words to adequately express my love for this :) It's phenomenal. It's instantly one of my fave Housefics ever. Thanks so much for writing it :)

Any chance you might cross-post it to sick_wilson?

::mems::mems::mems::

tasha_elizabeth July 3 2007, 14:20:48 UTC

I'm ashamed to say, I don't actually belong to sick_Wilson. I'll have to look into it.

wihluta July 3 2007, 10:59:08 UTC

Oh.
I'm honestly at a loss for words... This is a great story.
Thanks for sharing.

tasha_elizabeth July 4 2007, 18:01:16 UTC

Thank you for reading. I'm so glad you liked it.

jerico_cacaw July 3 2007, 13:34:01 UTC

This is beautiful. Really, extremely beautiful -- even if in a really, extremely painful way. Is in the little details you include (the dust, the wind, Wilson's hair, and House's) and in the cadence of the words. Wow. I don't know what else I can say, other than I would have loved this even if I didn't have a soft spot apocalypse!fics.

BTW: you use 'vaguely useful' for Wilson in the beginning, but 'vaguely important in the end. You did it on purpose?

tasha_elizabeth July 3 2007, 14:04:48 UTC

Eek, no, I didn't. Thanks for pointing that out. I'm glad you liked the fic!

topaz_eyes July 3 2007, 16:21:13 UTC

This is a fabulous scenario. Showing how the war and its aftermath changed Wilson--I loved it. You've drawn a spare, desperate and harsh world based on survival, and I loved how you showed Wilson trying to cope, trying to find comfort where he can. When Wilson rips his coat--that was such a strong, and sad, image. Also, I loved how the war didn't change House, yet he seems to deal with the changes better. Brilliant.

I do have some concrit for you: I think you could, and should, have ended your story at Then everything goes black as it slips away. I was absolutely blown away from the first part. The "and then he woke from his dream" ending, really lessens the power of the rest of the story, and makes Wilson's lessons about love and survival meaningless. I can understand wanting a happy ending, a second chance for Wilson, and it is your story; but this ending felt tacked on.

I also saw a few nitpicky typos, I hope you don't mind:

THE BOMB STUPID! You need a comma between "bomb" and "stupid".

he knows it’s been 27 days ( ... )

tasha_elizabeth July 4 2007, 17:56:30 UTC

Thanks so much for taking the time to write such a long detailed review. I really appreciate it. I will definitely take a long look at everything you mentioned. Sorry you didn't care for the ending.