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szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 10

Aug 05, 2014 19:36

So, what to do when you've written your daring rescue and confrontation with the arch-villain in Chapter 9 of 24? Why, take a detour into PSA Hell and bad soap opera shenanigans, of course!

( Hogwarts Overexposed Chapter 10 )

show don't tell, percy is evil, knickers, did not do the bloody research, informed wrongness, draco is ooc, my argument is pastede on yay, pov!fail, welsh railway, are you a witch or not, priorities be damned, retcon yay, madam malkin's mugglewear, ineffectual villainy, convention of the psychics, breast fixation, anticlimax, epic fail, please recycle where facilities exist, a description would be nice, badfic:hogwarts overexposed, department of redundancy department, hypocrisy, completely nonsexual, anvil of foreshadowing, draco trilogy wants him back, ginny is ooc, pointless wittering, you call that pacing, worst dating advice ever, idiot balls for everyone, continuity isn't optional, snape is ooc, education system from hell, approved hogwarts exposed dialogue voice, i blame the parents

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danel4d August 5 2014, 23:26:15 UTC

There is so much here which is so utterly dreadful, isn't there? I mean, there's the base level where it's never quite clear whether its spinning off from Psychic Serpent or not ( ... )

szaleniec1000 August 5 2014, 23:49:30 UTC

It's telling that he said on Yahoo that he killed off Wrong because he wanted to raise the stakes and felt that he'd done all he could with her as a villain. Yes, he made the Minister for Magic herself, theoretically the most powerful and influential person in wizarding Britain, a villain. And all she did was occasionally kidnap someone or blow something up, and he never saw any other potential in the idea. Pathetic.

sickbritkid2 August 6 2014, 11:11:43 UTC

No kidding, dude.

Not to mention how he utterly squanders the potential of having Salazar Slytherin be his main villain from here on out! IIRC, he basically just paces in every scene he's in and then blows up Jurassic Park, right?

Oh no instead wait haha he saw her lady-garden! Oops.

This kinda encapsulates everything wrong with Hogwarts Exposed. You've got some interesting potential in the "remaining Death Eaters at large", "Minister of Magic is secretly a worshiper of an ancient Dark Wizard", and "Voldemort's distant ancestor, Slytherin, is revived and poses a great threat" plots, but instead of actually developing and pursuing those plots, the dumbshit keeps hamstringing himself to meet his nudity quota...

szaleniec1000 August 6 2014, 13:34:48 UTC

IIRC, he basically just paces in every scene he's in and then blows up Jurassic Park, right?

From what I've heard, yes. And how someone can take a premise like "wizarding Jurassic Park" and make it shit... well, I'd say it's hard to believe, but Hogwarts Exposed.

szaleniec1000 August 6 2014, 12:24:57 UTC

And speaking of Psychic Serpent, why hasn't anyone made the connection between the Flaming Daughter and the Moonchild of this prophecy, and the same from the one in Psychic Serpent? This shouldn't be a mystery. And if they're not Ginny and Draco this time round, why even bother with the connection?

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