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Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 5 part 2

Mar 04, 2012 01:14

And here we go again.

( Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 5 )

balance of stupidity, please recycle where facilities exist, separated by a common language, quidditch needs more love, wrong word dammit, department of redundancy department, expospeak, the nudist doth protest too much, i can has characterisation, pin the semicolon on the monologue, the anvil symbolises heavy-handedness, pov!fail, hogwarts school of oratory, priorities be damned, anatomy fail, have i mentioned i hate this fic, nudity for everyone, harry potter, badfic:hogwarts too exposed, literally stupid, continuity isn't optional, passive voice

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tenkai_kujaku March 4 2012, 12:36:46 UTC

How many times do you reckon the author's going to misuse 'balance' in this fic? And how come he doesn't notice that the sentence means bugger all?

And in Hampshire I know we called breasts 'perky'...

szaleniec1000 March 4 2012, 13:24:51 UTC

I could cheat and do a text find for the word "balance" in the source files, but I'd rather just keep the ongoing count. Even if I do end up missing one or two that way, but that's not hugely likely because it sticks out like a sore thumb by now.

I'm not actually sure what we called them, or even how I'd express the idea myself. It's never really come up. I'm not convinced it belongs in the viewpoint of an eleven-year-old. Speaking of which, I did a mini-reading of the "expose your private area" line.

kanelives March 4 2012, 14:51:22 UTC

The way you said 'area' sounds exactly like Emperor Palpatine. Win!

kanelives March 4 2012, 14:53:38 UTC

Or perhaps I should say "goooooood!"

tenkai_kujaku March 4 2012, 17:58:48 UTC

Oh yes, don't cheat, it's a lot funnier this way :D

sickbritkid2 March 5 2012, 13:51:11 UTC

I love the sneering tone you took with the line, too, like you were characterizing Neil's Strawmanning of the counter-arguments against his nudist crap...

szaleniec1000 March 5 2012, 13:53:51 UTC

It's not escaped my notice that there's no actual substance to the counterarguments. It's barely even a strawman.

sickbritkid2 March 5 2012, 13:58:19 UTC

Good point.

What would you call it, then?

szaleniec1000 March 7 2012, 19:41:28 UTC

Very little substance and mostly hot air. A styrofoam man?

sith_droideka March 7 2012, 20:56:44 UTC

A politician? No, wait...

How about a hot air balloon man?

cal_yn February 11 2014, 05:58:08 UTC

A blimpman! Like the Hindenburg, except that we all WANT it to explode! :D (my grandpa balloons)

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szaleniec1000 March 4 2012, 13:36:38 UTC

Heh. :D

tenkai_kujaku March 4 2012, 17:56:12 UTC

BWAHAHAHA!
That never gets old!

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