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szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 23 part 1

Aug 31, 2011 13:17

Well, here's another chapter.( Read more... )

show don't tell, please form an orderly queue, did not do the bloody research, how do i used tense, expospeak, pov!fail, hogwarts school of oratory, harry is an idiot, hogwarts roboticised, priorities be damned, facepalming in frustration, message from fred, americanisms in the potterverse, damning with faint praise, madam malkin's mugglewear, convention of the psychics, that's why commas matter, badfic:hogwarts exposed, ginny/invisible man otp!, wrong word dammit, a description would be nice, department of redundancy department, it's contrived excuse time!, i can has characterisation, draco trilogy wants him back, sexism, you fail feminism forever, nudity for everyone, harry potter, said bookism, exact eavesdropping, literally stupid, continuity isn't optional, snape is ooc

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sickbritkid2 August 31 2011, 12:51:56 UTC

"Ever-present? Really? Even when her parents were killed, her favourite teacher kidnapped and her adopted little sister figure hospitalised?"

Shhh, you're bringing logic into this fanfic! Do that too much, and the entire narrative will collapse under its own ineptitude!

szaleniec1000 August 31 2011, 13:17:01 UTC

And there's the fact that she cries in every other scene. Presumably whilst smiling? *falls into collapsing narrative*

sickbritkid2 August 31 2011, 13:57:09 UTC

*dives and grabs for szaleniec's hand*

I gotcha, buddy!

szaleniec1000 August 31 2011, 14:20:19 UTC

Phew, thanks! Got to watch out for those plot holes. They open up when you least expect it.

sickbritkid2 August 31 2011, 14:25:20 UTC

No kidding. *looks at the whole*

Oh shit! It's becoming a canyon!

*runs like hell*

C'mon!

sith_droideka August 31 2011, 20:45:29 UTC

"*looks at the whole*"

Whole? Surely you mean hole?

I wasn't aware a whole could turn into a canyon.

/grammar nazi

sickbritkid2 August 31 2011, 21:32:16 UTC

"Whole" could mean "this entire fanfic series!"

zenithewonder August 31 2011, 15:49:43 UTC

And it gets worse. By the end of Too Exposed, this story already contradicts itself to heck and back and has more holes than Swiss cheese. Just remember the most important rule of HE- the protagonists can do no wrong. All they do is right. Ginny wears an exposing top? She's clearly trying to seduce Harry. Hermione does it? She's so sweet for giving Harry a nice view. Someone random doesn't mourn their dead parents long? They're heartless. Jamie doesn't mourn her dead parents long? She's so strong!

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