Comments | symbolism_egg: August 16th: "Evil is a Good Condition." (1)

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August 16th: "Evil is a Good Condition." (1)

Aug 16, 2008 09:33

Title: Ending the World
Summary: Jasdero and Devit are stronger now.
Notes: Written for 31_days

( Ending the World )

characters: devit, characters: jasdero, genre: serious, series: d. gray-man, length: very short

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candelaria August 17 2008, 14:05:51 UTC

...and wear all the mascara they want. YAY. Obviously if you don't have that you have nothing! D:<

AH I love this, it intrigues me. I have to re-read it a bit to fully grasp what's going on but omg, Jasdevi, you're too awesome. XD I think that's what I like the most about the Noah clan...they're quite happy to fuck everyone else over but in the end, amongst themselves, it all comes down to family. X)

You write the most awesome Jasdevi stuff. <3

symbolism_egg August 19 2008, 08:30:27 UTC

Mascara or death!

Thanks for the thoughts! I also like that aspect of the Noah Clan. I adore characters who're evil bastards but feel love/loyalty to someone. With the Noah Clan you get a lot of said characters, all at once. No way are they good--despite the title, DGray doesn't have much moral ambiguity--they're bastards out to destroy the world AND they care about each other. I love you, moral ambiguity!

Was it hard to grasp the meaning because of... subtlety (?), or would you recommend rewriting for clarity? Usually the fics sit around in Word for a long time, getting line-edited at least, but this one was different. I'm happy you like it, and thank you. :D Must get better at writing, though....

candelaria August 19 2008, 10:53:31 UTC

They should totally have their own brand with the amount they use. XD

I swear it's that aspect to them that makes me feel reluctant to hate them in that pure 'oh it's a villain, must hate bad guy' sort of way. lol moral ambiguity ftw. I hope Hoshino clarifies more about the Noah Clan in future, namely why the original Noah seems so bent on world destruction. XD Or maybe that's just disillusionment on the Earl's part. *ponders* I can only hope the remaining of the 13 Noah are as cool as the ones already there. I'll be very sad if any of them die. |D

It was hard to grasp because I wasn't sure about the time frame at first like 'is this after the Ark storyline or...not?' But I got it towards the end so don't worry. X) It's fine. <3 There's nothing more satisfying that making improvements in writing at least I think so haha XD

symbolism_egg August 19 2008, 11:49:35 UTC

If they had their own brand, they wouldn't have to go to the mascara store every other day.

Earl: So, Jasdevi, did you kill those guys I asked you to kill this morning?
Devit: Er, you see, we, uh--
Jasdero: No, but we went to the mascara store! :D

(It has to be an entire store devoted to mascara because of high demand in the DGray universe. See also: the Bookman, Miranda, Anita, etc.)

I tend to like villains in the first place, unless they're Just Too Evil. Hoshino's good at making the villains evil, powerful (to a certain point), and hella creepy while still being somehow sympathetic. Tiki is the best example. I hope we get more Noahs and Noah info! And flashbacks. Lots of flashbacks. Unless said flashback involves Devit being blond.

Oh, thanks for clarifying. It's supposed to be post-Noah, pre-series Jasdevi. I can see now how the first sentence could come across as referring to a mysterious post-ark power-up or something. If I changed it to "Jasdero and Devit are stronger than they were as normal humans." would that be ( ... )

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