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[sydneyalexis]

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Sydney Alexis

It was a small service--just her family and his. No more than thirty people. All of them standing on their beach at sunset.

Comments

[trouble2urh3art]

wow, this was amazing. It's great how you can flip back and fourth with your writing style. This could be a fic by itself, it was so emotional.

"I'm a computer security consultant."

love how you tie in stuff from healing into these fics, i guess it makes it easier for you.

i really loved it.

[sydneyalexis]

It's great how you can flip back and fourth with your writing style.

I wouldn't say flip. It just sort of happened that way when I was writing. Pieces of scenes kept coming to me and then I realized that the prompt was 'ends' so it makes sense that I only fed you the ends of what happened.

This could be a fic by itself, it was so emotional.

All of these 100 are probably going to be variations on a theme--sassy shit. LOL!

love how you tie in stuff from healing into these fics, i guess it makes it easier for you.

It's how I see Gus turning out--smart, devious, and a little bit of a bad boy. He is a Kinney after all. ;D

And then there's the fact that this gives me the opportunity to explore the areas of Gus' life that wouldn't fit into Healing.

i really loved it.

I'm glad. :D

i just noticed that you changed your layout, and got a paid account. I got a paid account so that I could house my fics in a place that didn't have pop-ups. I was going to buy webspace but LJ is a lot cheaper, easy to use, and allows instant

[trouble2urh3art]

i just noticed that you changed your layout, and got a paid account. I love this colour, it's one of my fav's, it so suttle and pretty to look at.

[justelizabeth]

Wow...this was amazing.

I have a love/hate relationship with deathfic. On one hand, I appreciate the deep emotions depicted in any well-written piece, and the honesty that can be brought out in characters when the finality of death make them think. On the other hand, I tend to react rather emotionally and feel kind of stupid sitting in front of my laptop crying over fictional characters. :-b

I think the style of this piece was perfectly suited to the subject matter. The random, in-and-out flashes of reality seemed to reflect Gus' clarity and awareness of the situation, while the memories of better times were poignant without seeming over-the-top.

Thanks for another excellent fic! You're being extremely productive so far...can't wait to read the rest! :o)

[sydneyalexis]

I have a love/hate relationship with deathfic.

I was going to slap a death!fic warning on it, but then I was like...well...she is a made up character. I think it was also pretty obvious what it was in the first sentence...

On the other hand, I tend to react rather emotionally and feel kind of stupid sitting in front of my laptop crying over fictional characters.

Wren's Dead Like Me crossover, Reaper Boy, did that to me. I mean sobbing mess.

And, yeah, I do have those couple of moments where I feel totally silly. But, you know, it's all good.

The random, in-and-out flashes of reality...without seeming over-the-top.

I was worried about people being able to follow what was going on at first, especially when I was throwing y'all into scenes mid-action. And then I remember that the prompt was 'ends' so it kind of made sense that I threw you in at the end of each scene.

Thanks for another excellent fic!

Thank you for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :D

You're being extremely productive so far...can't

[sydneyalexis]

I was actually planning on working on more Gus/El as part of the 100 fics. It's just a matter of what strikes me about the word when I begin to write.

But I'll read anything you write, so go where the muse takes you.

Wow. That's high praise.

Thank you for the feedback. :D

[herefordroad]

this is an incredible fic...i love how you structured it. even though it's based on a tragic event which is evident by this poignant thought of brian's:

"Brian knew just by the way his son looked he'd never recover from this."

you've included lighter conversation between brian and gus that is wonderful:

"If you're as tired as I think you are, you should have kept your ass at home,"..."And you sure as shit shouldn't be smoking,"

"The only reason you quit was because Pops withheld sex until you did it."

"So...are you going to sit out here and brood all night, or are you going to tell me what the fuck is going on so we can go back inside."

"Always the word smith."

"Always avoiding the issue."

"Pot. Kettle."

but in the end, it is a death fic and beautifully written:

"This beach was a part of her," Gus said, opening the small box and walking to the water's edge. He set it adrift in the water, watching the balsa wood carry her into the ocean. "And now she's a part of it."

jeannie

[sydneyalexis]

this is an incredible fic...i love how you structured it.

Thank you! :D

This is one of those fics that I loved, but I got the sense that most people didn't. Then again I've always been drawn to writing teh angst.

[herefordroad]

bring on the angst! i love it.

jeannie