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Brian's initial Log of the Huricane 8 comments are not much different from Andrews:
I Purposefully avoided giving the scientist, the assistant, and the spy names. They just don't need them. They were there to illustrate the failure. I didn't want the audience to grow attached to them. Brian's' first comment was to the tune of "Is there more to this? What about the scientist?"
I see two possible fixes, but I don't know how effective they would be. The first is that I add in the trivial details for these characters. The second is to reduce their scenes to reflect how insignificant they are. Basically trim out the parts that are not directly telling my story.
I think the first fix would make Andrew and Brian happy, but I don't think it would be a good solution. I hate how comic books will force information into casual dialog so that the audience is up to speed.
The second solution is more structural and probably healthy for the writing process. Maybe I did spend too much time on those two. Maybe I made them look too important.
I think I'll go with the second solution.
I Purposefully avoided giving the scientist, the assistant, and the spy names. They just don't need them. They were there to illustrate the failure. I didn't want the audience to grow attached to them. Brian's' first comment was to the tune of "Is there more to this? What about the scientist?"
I see two possible fixes, but I don't know how effective they would be. The first is that I add in the trivial details for these characters. The second is to reduce their scenes to reflect how insignificant they are. Basically trim out the parts that are not directly telling my story.
I think the first fix would make Andrew and Brian happy, but I don't think it would be a good solution. I hate how comic books will force information into casual dialog so that the audience is up to speed.
The second solution is more structural and probably healthy for the writing process. Maybe I did spend too much time on those two. Maybe I made them look too important.
I think I'll go with the second solution.