Never Runs Smooth - Chapter 1

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Title: Never Runs Smooth
Series: Takes place in the Firefly Sushi-verse created by terimaru
Rating: PG-13 For Fluff and Violence
Pairing: Mal/Inara
Word Count: 5,836
Timeline: set between between Mis-Ceptions and Inara's GiftSummary: First installment of my angst contribution to this delightful Sushi-verse. There's a reason why Mal doesn't believe in

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[prplhez8]

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First off: The Cliffie!?! What's up with that?!

Now onto the praise:

Guh. I love that Mal hasn't become Wimpy!Mal just because he and Inara are together. He's still a little nervous and wary...but so in love. *sigh*

Wonderful, just wonderful!

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*laughs* That's how I sent it to terimaru, and the break worked. There's more coming! Honest! ;-)

Nope, I can't see wimpy!Mal, no matter how in love he is with Inara. Look at the complicated relationship he has with Zoe.

The man is full of contradictions - his practical capacity for violence and killing if need be (Niska's thug through the engine), yet his reverence for innocence and goodness (Kaylee and later River).

There are so many facets to him, yet the one he likes to present seems so simple. I love it!

Thank you so much!

[terimaru]

Whoa!! So good. I love how you've developed the characters in Paraiso - and given them stories as well. Jenna and her rocks! That was a great addition, and I can just see Kaylee and all the girls spoiling her. So sweet with Jenna and Zoe and the sadness.

The Caribe & crew was inspired and the gunfight scene was so fast and unexpected! I loved that whole thing. And now we have poor, Bloody!Mal. *beg* Excellent.

Mal/Inara at the beginning...:melts: Truthfully, she found it endearing. Was it wrong to find so much of what he did unconsciously cute?

NO! NO IT'S NOT! :-D

I loved it all, but I'll leave some things for other people.

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And I can't tell you how relieved I am that you like the characters. Molly and Jenna in particular completely struck my fancy for some reason, but it was Abel and the possibilities of his relationship to Mal that drew me in to writing an angst segment for this 'verse

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First,
She tucked the blanket back around him to warm skin already chilled and began to absently stroke the hair from his forehead as he faced her.
*sigh*
Don't we wish they could have this? Yes we do.

Second, I've loved the description of Avery and Abel since the first, and you've done a lovely job expanding on it - I can see the town and its residents very clearly. Nice.

Third - geez! Nice building of tension and description of the action, and Mal's POV is suitably bewildered. Poor Mal. It never goes smooth.

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Oh, yes... Yes we do... :-D

Awesome! I'm glad you like it!

hehehehe, no, it never does. But that's what we love, right? Mal in motion is a thing to behold. In SO many ways. ;-)

[andburn1]

Holy shit! God, you're eeeeeevil. And amazing. Anxiously awaiting part two!

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Thank you! ;-) It was a particularly evil cliffie, wasn't it? *hides*

[paiger1218]

I loved this... anxious about part 2... and by the way, your icon makes me smile and then cry at the same time, its just so beautiful... I heart Mal!