To Please the Monster Inside [Carlisle/Jasper][Chapter Fourteen]
Title: To Please the Monster Inside [Chapter Fourteen]
Pairing: Carlisle/Jasper
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Fiction
Summary: The monster inside Jasper lusts for human blood. When the desire is too strong to resist, there is only one who can help. Carlisle tamed this monster once, and now he must try again.
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I would have commnted on other chapters but I've been reading this without and account and i've only just joined so I'll roll all my comments into one post.
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I did'nt really know what to expect when I started reading this. To be honest the only reason I started was because it was the first story I can across with a paring that involved Jasper. I'm glad I did.
I like the way the first chapter was sharp and to the point. It showed me what to expect but didnt give much away about what was to come.
I am enjoying the contrast you are making between the charcters. Jasper; lustful but disgusted with himself at the same time. Carlisle; Caring and compassionte ,doing what he can to protect his family. Edwards anger and Alices grife.
I was surprised at Esmes reaction , I would have expected her to be opossed to the idea but I think her understanding makes what he's doing some how worst for Jasper.
The tension between Jasper and Edward is so well writen , especial when Jasper is taunting Edward with his thoughts.
In the chapter where Jaspers in the shopping center I feel you captured his emotions perfectly and I loved the fact that even through his anger edward came to rescue him.
I think its amazing that Alice would be able to make jasper feel the exact way Carlisle does but he just didn't relise.
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I apoligize for the very long winded and bdly writen comment :S. (and the many spelling mistakes.)
I enjoyed this very much and hope that you continue to write it as beautifuly as you are now.
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Feedback gives me the drive to continue writing, and when it is feedback as detailed and positive as yours, then it makes me want to write even more.
I will definitely be continuing this story, and I look forward to hearing your thoughts on my work as I update.
Appreciate you taking the time to comment.
Thank you :)
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