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[suffolkgirl]

Chapter Five

Kara left Laura’s office and looked up and down the rock passageway, trying to remember which way she had come from.  She couldn’t, so in the end she shrugged and turned to the left, hoping to meet someone to point her in the right direction.

The passageway opened out into the largest cave Kara had seen so far.  It seemed to be used as

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[tracyj23]

I just caught up on the last 2 chapters. Where does the time go?

I really enjoyed Kara and Laura's discussion last chapter - it's nice to see the two women getting along, being open and honest and themselves with each other. I liked the part about Roslin noticing the smile and openness was from Kara not Starbuck. I think she too, is Laura not the President here and it helps them talk openly. :)

I think you're right about Lee (obviously - you wrote the story) but that there's more to it than just Dee dying, especially if they weren't getting along that well. And somehow I'm assuming this will be a Lee/Kara story yet ... maybe I'm wrong, but if it is, then I'm assuming there's still something there between them as far as he's concerned.

This chapter was positively chilling. The cell was scary as hell - I'd hate to be a part of it. But you wrote the characters so well though - Hotdog having nightmares and Cally being brutal and callous - I can see how badly they'd have been affected by the cylons and how much it would have changed them. Not to mention Lee of course (but I already talked about him before). Nice chapter.

Looking forward to more. :)

[suffolkgirl]

Glad you liked the Kara & Laura scene, especially as it was first go at doing Laura's POV. It's a relationship not often covered in the show, so it was interesting to write.

I'm afraid this story is rather grim - don't know what was going on in my head when I got the idea for it, must have been a bad day. In fact, I was having a big crisis of confidence last night that the story is too grim, and people won't stick with it until it lightens up - but then they did with 'Lost and Found'.

And somehow I'm assuming this will be a Lee/Kara story yet ... maybe I'm wrong, but if it is, then I'm assuming there's still something there between them as far as he's concerned.

Don't worry, Tracy, this is me - I'm not sure I'm capable of writing a non Lee/Kara story! Everything I write turns into one, even when one of them is dead before the story even begins!

Lee's not quite as indifferent to her as he likes to think he is - there was definitely a case of 'protesting too much' going on in chapter 3.

And don't worry if you get behind with this story - I'm actually going on holiday for a week on Saturday, so there's going to be a week with no updates to catch up in. I.

[tracyj23]

Ooh, good. My chance. :) I've got several other people's stories to catch up with too, and I'm trying to find time to work on my own ... it's tough, even though I don't go to work I still can't find as much time as I'd like. :)

I like that the story is dark and rather scary. Different than most of the others I'm keeping up with right now. Have you seen my note at LJ recommending people go to brokenmneumonic's LJ? I think you should give it a try if you get the chance. He's got a real handle on the inner Lee and has written a series of drabbles from Lee's POV and is still mid-Fractured, his long Lee introspective story. I think you'd really like all of them.

Where are you off to on holidays? I could use one of them myself. Preferably without anyone else. :)

[suffolkgirl]

Thanks for the story rec, I'll have a look.

I'm off to Portugal - just going to sit on the beach and relax after a very busy summer and not think about work at all!!

I've been to Portugal a couple of times before and always enjoyed it - it's very relaxed, and the people are very friendly - as long as you don't make the mistake of trying to speak Spanish!

Just read your rant about ffnet on my review page there. I haven't had problems as bad as yours, but one of my stories disappeared from my profile page for a month, even though my account said it was there, and then suddenly reappeared yesterday. That was partly why I decided to start this LJ, so I didn't have to rely on ffnet completely.

I was going to offer to log into the help section on ffnet for you and report your problems, but just discovered I can't - the help site won't recognise me either!!

[tracyj23]

I've asked a couple of other friends to try logging into the help section so we'll see. I've had this chapter uploaded for 5 days now and I still can't post it. That must be a record.

I hope you have a great vacation (though I'm sure you'll post another chapter before you go - right?) If you have a digital camera, take some pictures and post them here. I'd love to see - I've never been there.

[suffolkgirl]

Oh, there will be pictures - my husband is a photography fanatic - I spend half my time on holiday hanging around waiting for him to take pictures. Actually all the icons I've used on this LJ are his photos.

Yes, definitely posting at least one more chapter before I go away.