Secret Video Diary of a Billionaire (1/?)

[sturmundwank]

title: Secret Video Diary of a Billionaire (1/?)
fandom: The Social Network
pairing: Mark/Eduardo
word count: 3149
rating: PG-13
warnings: British spelling with Mid-Atlantic punctuation (though I was considerate enough to use 'elevator'), bad characterisation, guys this is a screenplay, less intentional lulz than the title implies, misogynistic

Comments

[electrumqueen]

ahhhhh this is actually so awesome i don't even. *flails incoherently, is delighted*

[sturmundwank]

Thanks a lot :) This is such a nice first comment! *flails right back at you*

[ani_coolgirl]

:O This is awesome. Awesome beyond belief. Your dialogue is just spot on and I can hear it very clearly in my head; it's a very good imitation of Sorkin's writing. The script style is just perfect.

You're just awesome. You better have the courage to finish this thing or else... something vaguely threatening will happen to you.

[sturmundwank]

Oh wow, thank you! The dialogue was very hard to write, actually; I'm incredibly glad that you like it.

I'm almost certain I'll write a sequel to this story (maybe not before January, though), but I don't know if I'll ever actually finish the whole thing. It's supposed to be quite long and I'm not a very prolific writer. We'll see. I promise to try!

Thank you for the kind words :)

[moth_and_flame]

I really liked this, even though I'm not generally fond of script formats. I thought the dialogue was excellent - especially Mark's.

[sturmundwank]

Thank you! I was really worried that Mark wouldn't come out right, so I'm heartened to know that you liked his voice.

It's weird; me, I find most plays unbearably dull to read, but I love reading screenplays. But I definitely get what you're saying.

[cimness]

This dialogue is excellent and rings quite authentic! The cuts back and forth and the rising drama are also noticeably Sorkinesque, and made for a really fun read. I'm interested to see where you go with it!

[sturmundwank]

Thank you very much! I tried to visualise the story as a cinematic sequence rather than an uninterrupted narrative, which probably helped a lot. The experience of asking myself questions like "Can I imagine reading this line in an actual script?' and "How long should this scene be?" was quite enlightening.

There will be a sequel, but probably not in the near future.

[cimness]

It really paid off! I could see the scriptiness of it. And no worries, I didn't mean to press for a sequel or anything - I just mentioned that because of the "1/?" note at the top!

[sturmundwank]

Yeah, I felt confident enough to put it there D: No, seriously, I don't feel pressured or anything. It's so nice that people want me to write more :)

Thanks again!

[learnthemusic]

Yeah, no, this was fantastic and you should definitely revisit it. I gotta say I wasn't expecting Mark to kiss Eduardo there but it's a nice way of delving right into the plot.

Very original idea, of course. Enjoyable. Your dialogue is pretty spot-on, in my opinion. Maybe there's nothing wrong with your characters at all! ;)

Excited to see the rest of this.

[sturmundwank]

Thanks! I was kind of taken aback myself when Mark did that. I think he didn't want to hear Eduardo say "you're not even worth it" because Eduardo would have meant it and that would have been the end, for real. idk idk, maybe I'm just full of shit.

Anyway, thank you :)