Oh I should probably mention my feelings on Key's death: slightly sad but happy we got the information everyone was waiting on (about Noh) lol. Hmmm I think it was a good trade-off, though I was finally starting to like Key a bit. Well, I liked him when Onew was punching him, does that count? And when he was unconscious and not talking. And then when he was stabbed in the neck. The death part was a little much, but I can't say I didn't like him then. He died by the hands of another hated person of mine, which I guess kind of makes me hate him a bit more. :DDD lol Good job Key, you made me confused about your death.
I feel a bit better about killing him, seeing that I actually created some sympathy for him. D: Since there's a lot of backstory there (and you hardly like.. peek at the extent of it in what I wrote), I thought people kind of shrug his death off. (Maybe not be like "YEEAHH" after his feelings, but not feel sad at all.)
:DD Soo thank all of you, for sharing these feelings. (maybe I can sleep without waking myself up screaming about it now?)
idk I really do feel bad about it even now lollll that's such a SAD way for someone's favorite character to go. ;_;
It very much IS a sad way for someone's fave character to go! (lawl I can't wait to get off my ass and write my story where everyone will hate me in the end muahahahhaaa) <--thrives on being hated?
I think if you wanted to get a little deeper into Key's side of things, maybe in the rewrite, include a few chapters of his point of view? Maybe not when he's just being mean, but closer to his end so we can see some of his motivations a little more and can sympathize with him. I appreciated him as a character in that he was very true to his goals in the long run and his own set of morals didn't waver even in the end, when faced with Heechul. He called him out even though it was most likely going to be a death sentence. Bravo.
Oh! You said you wanted us to point out things? This may not be anything like a typo, I'm just confused what is happening in this line:
Key's blood splashed in a puddle against the floor, and Key shoved him down on top of it. So.. Key's blood splashed on the floor.. and Key shoved... Heechul down on top of.. the
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OMG I fixed it.. or am fixing it.. no I fixed it omg it's really bad when I'm so groggy I don't know what I've done/am doing. thankyouthankyouthankyou~!!
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:DD Soo thank all of you, for sharing these feelings. (maybe I can sleep without waking myself up screaming about it now?)
idk I really do feel bad about it even now lollll that's such a SAD way for someone's favorite character to go. ;_;
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I think if you wanted to get a little deeper into Key's side of things, maybe in the rewrite, include a few chapters of his point of view? Maybe not when he's just being mean, but closer to his end so we can see some of his motivations a little more and can sympathize with him. I appreciated him as a character in that he was very true to his goals in the long run and his own set of morals didn't waver even in the end, when faced with Heechul. He called him out even though it was most likely going to be a death sentence. Bravo.
Oh! You said you wanted us to point out things? This may not be anything like a typo, I'm just confused what is happening in this line:
Key's blood splashed in a puddle against the floor, and Key shoved him down on top of it. So.. Key's blood splashed on the floor.. and Key shoved... Heechul down on top of.. the ( ... )
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