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I've been told in the past -- kindly and unkindly -- how, when critisizing a story, I should best pack the critisism into some nice words, like "I liked your story, but you have too many typos, please spell-check" or something. And I agree, in a way, because of course I would like that much better than someone basically saying "I didn't like your story, and this is why...", too. But. Sometimes there is nothing good about a story, or I wouldn't know if there is, because I don't even make it all the way through. Like if you do the apparently very popular tense hopping. If it happens once or twice, fine. If the story is really good, I might not even notice it. If, on the other hand, it happens multiple times, I'll stop reading. If you keep calling your character "the actor" during a sex scene, I'll stop reading. If you're (repeatedly) unable to put a full stop at the end of your sentences, I'll stop reading. If in any way you give me the impression that you didn't bother to read the story yourself after you were finished -- or didn't even run a spell check -- I'll stop reading. One of you (sorry, don't remember who) said lately that mistakes do happen, of course, but when you (the reader) spend more time correcting a story in your head than you actually spend reading it, it's just too much.
You might say that at least the epithet thing falls under personal preference -- although I'll argue that it falls under common sense. Nobody calls someone else (or worse: himself) "the actor" in his head. Or "the older man". But the rest ist bad style/editing/? I'm not sure what to call it. Anyway, it's bad. And I should be allowed to comment on it, whether I liked your story as a whole or not. Without the next comment being someone telling the author not to listen to stupid bitches like me who can't say a nice thing about the story, only complain, and if I don't like it, I shouldn't read it.
Oh, in case you were wondering, no this hasn't been brought on by a recent event. I just felt like saying it.
I'm watching LA Ink, and apart from cringing every time I see that one girl's piercings in her cheeks, there was another girl who had an eye tattooed on her back. Seriously, a human eye -- hers, actually. Why would you do that? It makes me think of that one Stephen King story where a former astronaut has eyes growing on his fingers. I was terrified for days after a friend reading that when I was about 12.
Speaking of tattoos, I always wanted to write Jensen having a small devil's trap on his ankle into a story, but it never fits!
I have a few more songs for my singing project now (although not sung yet). It's not that I'm so great at singing, but I think my friend will like it. And while searching for more instrumental versions of songs, I came across this little video.
A guy playing Kelly Clarkson's Because of You on the piano. Sadly I couldn't use this version, because the sound isn't that great, but I love how he sits down and explains why he's chosen this particular song and is all embarassed. This guy is so cute! I want to snatch him right out of the video and keep him under my pillow. Plus his boyfriend, hee, because of course he's gay. Actually the video with the boyfriend made me want to smack him over the head and tell him you shouldn't make completely senseless videos for all the world to see just because you can (except if the kiss had been longer). But he's cute in this one.
You might say that at least the epithet thing falls under personal preference -- although I'll argue that it falls under common sense. Nobody calls someone else (or worse: himself) "the actor" in his head. Or "the older man". But the rest ist bad style/editing/? I'm not sure what to call it. Anyway, it's bad. And I should be allowed to comment on it, whether I liked your story as a whole or not. Without the next comment being someone telling the author not to listen to stupid bitches like me who can't say a nice thing about the story, only complain, and if I don't like it, I shouldn't read it.
Oh, in case you were wondering, no this hasn't been brought on by a recent event. I just felt like saying it.
I'm watching LA Ink, and apart from cringing every time I see that one girl's piercings in her cheeks, there was another girl who had an eye tattooed on her back. Seriously, a human eye -- hers, actually. Why would you do that? It makes me think of that one Stephen King story where a former astronaut has eyes growing on his fingers. I was terrified for days after a friend reading that when I was about 12.
Speaking of tattoos, I always wanted to write Jensen having a small devil's trap on his ankle into a story, but it never fits!
I have a few more songs for my singing project now (although not sung yet). It's not that I'm so great at singing, but I think my friend will like it. And while searching for more instrumental versions of songs, I came across this little video.
Click to viewA guy playing Kelly Clarkson's Because of You on the piano. Sadly I couldn't use this version, because the sound isn't that great, but I love how he sits down and explains why he's chosen this particular song and is all embarassed. This guy is so cute! I want to snatch him right out of the video and keep him under my pillow. Plus his boyfriend, hee, because of course he's gay. Actually the video with the boyfriend made me want to smack him over the head and tell him you shouldn't make completely senseless videos for all the world to see just because you can (except if the kiss had been longer). But he's cute in this one.