Overwhelmed | Chapter 8 | Oblivion
Title: Overwhelmed: Chapter 8: Oblivion
Author: starzki
Rating: MA
Genre: Romance
Word Count: 2131
Summary: Kaname and Sousuke finally have all the time they need to come together and explore their feelings for one another. Spoilers for the series. Post Always Stand by Me, Part 2. Chapter 8: Oblivion: Kaname and Sousuke lose themselves in one another.
LINK: ff.net
NOTES:
This was originally going to be the last chapter, but as I was going over everything in my head, I've decided to include an epilogue to this story.
There are a few reasons for this: First, there's the structure of the story and the perspectives I took. From chapter one, I started with Kaname's perspective, then moved to Sousuke's in chapter two, then alternated until chapter seven. This chapter was about both of them, so I didn't take one perspective over the other. It's kind of weird and lopsided, but I made my decision and I'm sticking with it. This means that there were four Kaname chapters and only three Sousuke chapters. I like symmetry, so I'm adding another Sousuke chapter.
Second, I think a little wrap-up for this story is in order. Just a light little ending that might point them toward the future somewhat. Not too much, but maybe a little.
My feelings on this chapter are mostly good. There is the different perspective than the rest of the story that kind of irks me, but like I said, it's a decision that I thought out and am happy with. Also, like last chapter, the sexy vocab was my undoing. Luckily, scribefigaro had many, many suggestions for me when he looked over this story before I posted it. :)
As for the scenario, I did take a little artistic license. Simultaneous orgasms for a pair of virgins who are having their first go at sex is pretty unlikely, I'll admit. But I wanted to make it a fantastic experience for both and that's how I wanted them to end up. I did try to throw in a little reality with the bumbling around beforehand, so it's not completely unrealistic! ;)
Overall, as I said, I'm pretty happy with this. And now my multi-chapter porn is 95% done! Amazing! I'll actually be kind of sad when I'm done with it. :(
Author: starzki
Rating: MA
Genre: Romance
Word Count: 2131
Summary: Kaname and Sousuke finally have all the time they need to come together and explore their feelings for one another. Spoilers for the series. Post Always Stand by Me, Part 2. Chapter 8: Oblivion: Kaname and Sousuke lose themselves in one another.
LINK: ff.net
NOTES:
This was originally going to be the last chapter, but as I was going over everything in my head, I've decided to include an epilogue to this story.
There are a few reasons for this: First, there's the structure of the story and the perspectives I took. From chapter one, I started with Kaname's perspective, then moved to Sousuke's in chapter two, then alternated until chapter seven. This chapter was about both of them, so I didn't take one perspective over the other. It's kind of weird and lopsided, but I made my decision and I'm sticking with it. This means that there were four Kaname chapters and only three Sousuke chapters. I like symmetry, so I'm adding another Sousuke chapter.
Second, I think a little wrap-up for this story is in order. Just a light little ending that might point them toward the future somewhat. Not too much, but maybe a little.
My feelings on this chapter are mostly good. There is the different perspective than the rest of the story that kind of irks me, but like I said, it's a decision that I thought out and am happy with. Also, like last chapter, the sexy vocab was my undoing. Luckily, scribefigaro had many, many suggestions for me when he looked over this story before I posted it. :)
As for the scenario, I did take a little artistic license. Simultaneous orgasms for a pair of virgins who are having their first go at sex is pretty unlikely, I'll admit. But I wanted to make it a fantastic experience for both and that's how I wanted them to end up. I did try to throw in a little reality with the bumbling around beforehand, so it's not completely unrealistic! ;)
Overall, as I said, I'm pretty happy with this. And now my multi-chapter porn is 95% done! Amazing! I'll actually be kind of sad when I'm done with it. :(