Kiss and Make Up (Teen, slight spoiler for Duet, Possibly McKay/Sheppard)
This was my entry for challenge #1 - Mistaken Identity - at atlantis_lvw. Originally posted anonymously here
Kiss and Make Up (Teen, slight spoiler for Duet, possibly McKay/Sheppard) by Starrylizard
Oooh how could I forget to add that this was beta read by the lovely rinkle, who is also still in the comp. Thanks Rinne!
Rodney snickered as he pressed a small device to his chest and then stepped into the corridor directly in front of Lieutenant Laura Cadman. “Lieutenant. You’re needed in the control room urgently.”
“Yes, Sir.” Cadman snapped to attention. “Is that all, Sir?” Rodney nodded, as Cadman took off down the corridor at a fast pace.
Cadman jogged around the corner, before she slowed, turned around and headed back. This was not the first time she’d been surprised by Colonel Sheppard at awkward moments and each time she’d reached her destination only to find that there was no emergency. Cadman’s growing sense of suspicion finally had the best of her. She quietly peered around the corner, only to see the Colonel chuckling to himself. “Falls for it every time,” he mused, before reaching to touch something at his chest. The Colonel appeared to shimmer for a moment and then one very amused-looking Rodney McKay was revealed.
“So that’s your game, is it?” she murmured. She’d thought things had been too quiet since she’d set off that smoke bomb resulting in Rodney storming out of his quarters covered in fire retardant foam. A sly grin formed on Cadman’s face as she walked away.
*
Rodney sighed as the door slid closed behind him. Rubbing at his tired, aching eyes, he gave a large yawn, pulled his ear com free and kicked off his shoes. He looked up just as something shifted in the darkness and gave a startled yelp.
Dressed in black, the lean figure of Sheppard seemed to materialize from the shadows of the room, moving so silently that it was no wonder that Rodney hadn’t noticed him there.
“Colonel? What are you doing, trying to scare me to death?”
Sheppard continued to advance on Rodney almost menacingly, one finger coming up to his lips in a signal for silence, as a wicked grin spread across his mouth. The sight unnerved Rodney, who backed up until he felt his back hit the wall. He could still feel his pulse beating rapidly in his chest from the initial fright. Sheppard leaned closer, placing a hand on the wall beside his head and Rodney whimpered slightly, his pulse now racing from a different emotion. He looked up into Sheppard’s eyes as they gleamed strangely in the darkness.
“What are you…” Rodney started to ask again, but then Sheppard’s lips were covering his own, cool and soft, and Rodney’s mouth seemed to tingle with electricity as his lips opened under the sensation, the kiss sending shivers down his spine, messages racing to other areas of his body.
“Mmmngh.” Rodney wasn’t sure he would ever form an intelligent sentence again, as Sheppard stepped back and, with another cool smile, left the room.
*
Sheppard was surprised to see Lieutenant Cadman leaving Rodney’s room. She nodded to him, before walking off in the other direction. He palmed open the door to Rodney’s quarters.
“Hey buddy, what’s up?” Sheppard stopped dead in his tracks when he saw Rodney’s expression. He was looking at Sheppard as if he’d suddenly grown horns. “I saw Cadman leaving. You two aren’t still at war with each other, are you?”
Rodney blinked, his expression shifting to one of dawning comprehension. “You saw Cadman leaving? Just then?” John nodded, a confused look on his face.
“Oh my…” Rodney snickered. “Ha, she had me, but she doesn’t know about,” Rodney gestured between Sheppard and himself several times. “I mean, she couldn’t and she... Ha!”
“So did you guys kiss and make up or what?” Sheppard scratched his head in confusion as Rodney suddenly burst into a very un-Rodney-like fit of the giggles.
*
Cadman scowled down at the console. She was sure Rodney had had a hand in this particular duty assignment. Resetting computer codes had to be the most boring job on the list. As such, she looked up with interest as Colonel Sheppard entered the lab with Rodney. From her current position they wouldn’t be able to see her, and so she happily listened in on their conversation.
“So Rodney, coming for lunch?”
“I just have to finish running this simulation and I’ll come and join you.”
“All right, don’t be too long.” Sheppard reached out a hand, lightly ghosting it along Rodney’s arm. “I thought we could eat in my quarters.”
“Mmm, sounds good.” Rodney smiled, reaching his own hand out to gently touch Sheppard’s face and run it down his rumpled white shirt, before Sheppard winked at Rodney and walked out the main door.
Cadman took a breath and, suddenly not wanting her presence known, she snuck out the back door of the lab, quietly stepping into the corridor. She carefully mulled over the details of what she had just seen. Sheppard and McKay. She’d suspected maybe they had something going on when she was sharing his headspace, but no; they couldn’t be. Could they?
She was so busy with her thoughts that she almost walked straight into… “Good afternoon, Lieutenant.” Cadman blinked, looking up, as Sheppard walked past her.
There was no way that the man could have made it from the lab door she had seen him exit just moments earlier to here in such a short space of time - at least not without running, and he certainly didn’t look puffed. Besides he was now wearing a black t-shirt. Gotcha McKay! You almost had me there.
*
A few minutes after Sheppard walked out of the lab, Zelenka walked in via the back door. He pulled at the small device on his chest, watching as the world shimmered for a moment, before it came free and he handed it to the waiting Rodney.
“I did as you asked and walked around the corridors outside. People really thought I was the Colonel. You should try it, Rodney.”
“Huh, maybe I will later.” Rodney grinned mischievously as he left for lunch.
Notes: I found the feedback/reasons for votes very interesting. It seems many people found it confusing and couldn't figure out the relationships. My response - that was deliberate and the point of the story. I understand if it didn't work for you though.
There were a few other things mentioned that I agree with completey. Yes this story is a little stilted and probably needs more build up. It did have it to begin with too... but, dude...1000 word limit! I rest my case. *grins* (note to self: Write a simpler story next time, so the word limit isn't such a pain. *g*)
Thankyou to people for the feedback. It was really interesting and hopefully will help me with the next entry.
And hey, I got through to the next round! Yay!
Kiss and Make Up (Teen, slight spoiler for Duet, possibly McKay/Sheppard) by Starrylizard
Oooh how could I forget to add that this was beta read by the lovely rinkle, who is also still in the comp. Thanks Rinne!
Rodney snickered as he pressed a small device to his chest and then stepped into the corridor directly in front of Lieutenant Laura Cadman. “Lieutenant. You’re needed in the control room urgently.”
“Yes, Sir.” Cadman snapped to attention. “Is that all, Sir?” Rodney nodded, as Cadman took off down the corridor at a fast pace.
Cadman jogged around the corner, before she slowed, turned around and headed back. This was not the first time she’d been surprised by Colonel Sheppard at awkward moments and each time she’d reached her destination only to find that there was no emergency. Cadman’s growing sense of suspicion finally had the best of her. She quietly peered around the corner, only to see the Colonel chuckling to himself. “Falls for it every time,” he mused, before reaching to touch something at his chest. The Colonel appeared to shimmer for a moment and then one very amused-looking Rodney McKay was revealed.
“So that’s your game, is it?” she murmured. She’d thought things had been too quiet since she’d set off that smoke bomb resulting in Rodney storming out of his quarters covered in fire retardant foam. A sly grin formed on Cadman’s face as she walked away.
*
Rodney sighed as the door slid closed behind him. Rubbing at his tired, aching eyes, he gave a large yawn, pulled his ear com free and kicked off his shoes. He looked up just as something shifted in the darkness and gave a startled yelp.
Dressed in black, the lean figure of Sheppard seemed to materialize from the shadows of the room, moving so silently that it was no wonder that Rodney hadn’t noticed him there.
“Colonel? What are you doing, trying to scare me to death?”
Sheppard continued to advance on Rodney almost menacingly, one finger coming up to his lips in a signal for silence, as a wicked grin spread across his mouth. The sight unnerved Rodney, who backed up until he felt his back hit the wall. He could still feel his pulse beating rapidly in his chest from the initial fright. Sheppard leaned closer, placing a hand on the wall beside his head and Rodney whimpered slightly, his pulse now racing from a different emotion. He looked up into Sheppard’s eyes as they gleamed strangely in the darkness.
“What are you…” Rodney started to ask again, but then Sheppard’s lips were covering his own, cool and soft, and Rodney’s mouth seemed to tingle with electricity as his lips opened under the sensation, the kiss sending shivers down his spine, messages racing to other areas of his body.
“Mmmngh.” Rodney wasn’t sure he would ever form an intelligent sentence again, as Sheppard stepped back and, with another cool smile, left the room.
*
Sheppard was surprised to see Lieutenant Cadman leaving Rodney’s room. She nodded to him, before walking off in the other direction. He palmed open the door to Rodney’s quarters.
“Hey buddy, what’s up?” Sheppard stopped dead in his tracks when he saw Rodney’s expression. He was looking at Sheppard as if he’d suddenly grown horns. “I saw Cadman leaving. You two aren’t still at war with each other, are you?”
Rodney blinked, his expression shifting to one of dawning comprehension. “You saw Cadman leaving? Just then?” John nodded, a confused look on his face.
“Oh my…” Rodney snickered. “Ha, she had me, but she doesn’t know about,” Rodney gestured between Sheppard and himself several times. “I mean, she couldn’t and she... Ha!”
“So did you guys kiss and make up or what?” Sheppard scratched his head in confusion as Rodney suddenly burst into a very un-Rodney-like fit of the giggles.
*
Cadman scowled down at the console. She was sure Rodney had had a hand in this particular duty assignment. Resetting computer codes had to be the most boring job on the list. As such, she looked up with interest as Colonel Sheppard entered the lab with Rodney. From her current position they wouldn’t be able to see her, and so she happily listened in on their conversation.
“So Rodney, coming for lunch?”
“I just have to finish running this simulation and I’ll come and join you.”
“All right, don’t be too long.” Sheppard reached out a hand, lightly ghosting it along Rodney’s arm. “I thought we could eat in my quarters.”
“Mmm, sounds good.” Rodney smiled, reaching his own hand out to gently touch Sheppard’s face and run it down his rumpled white shirt, before Sheppard winked at Rodney and walked out the main door.
Cadman took a breath and, suddenly not wanting her presence known, she snuck out the back door of the lab, quietly stepping into the corridor. She carefully mulled over the details of what she had just seen. Sheppard and McKay. She’d suspected maybe they had something going on when she was sharing his headspace, but no; they couldn’t be. Could they?
She was so busy with her thoughts that she almost walked straight into… “Good afternoon, Lieutenant.” Cadman blinked, looking up, as Sheppard walked past her.
There was no way that the man could have made it from the lab door she had seen him exit just moments earlier to here in such a short space of time - at least not without running, and he certainly didn’t look puffed. Besides he was now wearing a black t-shirt. Gotcha McKay! You almost had me there.
*
A few minutes after Sheppard walked out of the lab, Zelenka walked in via the back door. He pulled at the small device on his chest, watching as the world shimmered for a moment, before it came free and he handed it to the waiting Rodney.
“I did as you asked and walked around the corridors outside. People really thought I was the Colonel. You should try it, Rodney.”
“Huh, maybe I will later.” Rodney grinned mischievously as he left for lunch.
Notes: I found the feedback/reasons for votes very interesting. It seems many people found it confusing and couldn't figure out the relationships. My response - that was deliberate and the point of the story. I understand if it didn't work for you though.
There were a few other things mentioned that I agree with completey. Yes this story is a little stilted and probably needs more build up. It did have it to begin with too... but, dude...1000 word limit! I rest my case. *grins* (note to self: Write a simpler story next time, so the word limit isn't such a pain. *g*)
Thankyou to people for the feedback. It was really interesting and hopefully will help me with the next entry.
And hey, I got through to the next round! Yay!