Beg and Plead [Kingdom Hearts, Axel/Roxas, PG-13]

[harukami]

Title: Beg and Plead
Author: harukami
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: None
Word Count: 866
Author's Notes: For the prompt: Axel/Roxas: begging - he doesn't really have pride but he'd give it up for Roxas anyway

Comments

[liralen]

Oh... how... painfully gorgeous. I love how you cut from scene to scene and Axel's emotional intensity from Castle...

I really loved your physical representation of how Axel moves with his weapons, that hip-centered swing. Nicely caught.

And it is heartbreaking. Poor Axel.

Beautifully done. Thank you.

[emerald_embers]

Goooooooood god almighty, that was perfect. Breathlessly perfect. Your descriptions, your dialogue - just, god, wow. Added to memories pronto because sweet almighty, as if I can come up with a coherent comment for how gorgeous that was. Your descriptions of Axel's hips, Roxas' eyes, the amorality of them and the feeling or not-quite-feeling-but-almost-there, this entire bit "Fuck me," Axel says into his ear, and laughs as Roxas tenses more. "C'mon, Roxas, it'd be fun. I wanna push you down, but you won't let me, right? C'mon, let me--", and the way you used the prompt, it's just - wow.

It's stunning, that's what it is :).