still thinking about Haiku's? How 90's of me....
A haiku is a short none rhyming poem, comprised of three lines, the 1st with five syllables, the 2nd with seven, and the 3rd with five again. Adding to its simplicity, it contains no punctuation.
I hold a small pot
but I can still set it down
it does not hold me
That was one of mine, called “holding on”. I wrote it for a friend who asked me to compose one on pottery. As you can see, it turned out to not be about pottery at all.
If correctly applied in a thoughtful way, a Haiku forces you to tell the truth. Ostensibly at first viewing an obvious declaration, the truth lies somewhere inside. Your neat rhymes and clever word play won’t get you a merit badge here. Limiting your syllables does not allow you to flower it up, you have to cut it back, follow the rules, and see what remains.
Any effort that is original, and obeys the rules, and is posted in the comments section on my page gets a ‘truth or dare’, or nothing. Go on then.. do it for nothing….
Some more examples of mine (google Haiku for a look at how the pro’s do it, I don’t claim to be one) :
I need a bath
I form words like clay
the dirt gets under my skin
I wash it away
The dirty truth - a set of six
I never plant things
yet they grow all around me
for I am rootless
I cut myself loose
to save the whole team I said
yet they fell I held
that elegant man
with a twisted searching soul
will never want me
let me try it on
and hear sounds all about me
stripped of the lies
I choose to tape it
In black and white moving frame
to record the act
I yearn to sleep
It’s always a big relief
to turn off the lights