keep it upstairs {ncis - tony, ziva}

[slybrunette]

Title: Keep It Upstairs
Fandom: NCIS
Characters/Pairings: Tony, Ziva (implied ship)
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 2,532
Author's Note: I pretty much never write in this fandom, no matter how religiously I watch. This is, therefore, a fluke. I hope it's a good one.
Summary: Post "Rule Fifty-One". His return is met with relative indifference from across

Comments

[slybrunette]

Holy hell do you leave epic reviews. Not that I'm complaining. Ever. Just...I'm blown away, since this is my first time with this pairing. Or, well, first time posting (I write, a lot). I want to write more though, for sure, so you're in luck there :)

I hope Jackson doesn't get killed either but I wouldn't put it past them. I think he's fabulous character and absolutely love the actor who plays him (he keeps popping up in my shows, so that's a good thing I guess).

Even after such life and death situations, the job they do, the risks they put themselves in, they can NEVER face each other and what they feel. And just with these two lines, you've conveyed it all so perfectly.

Thank goodness that worked for you because I was seriously unsure about that entire scene. It felt anticlimactic but, in a way, I think a lot of their scenes go that way. They won't come out with it. It's part of what makes them very...tragic.

Mesmerized by such details. They're just so... they add a whole other level of intimacy to the sceneFor this, you can

[citron_presse]

I've watched NCIS since the beginning, but I have never read a fic before. I have no idea quite why . . . and, despite that, I couldn't resist checking out yours.

I absolutely loved it. So in character, while giving Tony substance that in no way strays from canon but deepens it beautifully; and your Ziva is wonderful. Also, can I pick out how much I adored the subtlety of your reference to Ziva's garbled colloquialisms? - they were fun, and I love that Tony misses them, but I just loved the recognition that she's not making so many mistakes. It was a great way to deal with a character trait; and one of many understated, powerful little moments.

I'm so impressed by your ability to write these characters and make them real. It's an awesome fic.

[slybrunette]

Really? I feel kind of honored. I actually have been thinking about your crossover prompt at the drabblethon -- go figure.

Tony and substance...canon's been having issues with that these past few episodes, I have to say, so thanks for that. As for the colloquialisms (where was that word when I was looking for it before, when I was writing, lol), their absence has definitely been noted but I read it as character development, in a way, and I rarely object to that.

I'm so glad you liked this! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

[citron_presse]

I actually have been thinking about your crossover prompt at the drabblethon
I really hope you do it. I've had some kind of Addison/Gibbs interaction embryonically in my head for, like, two years now . . . and I figured it was time to free it up in case someone who could actually make something of it would like it. You would be perfect!

I also took the absence of colloquialisms as character development, and I loved how you used that here.

Again, awesome stuff.

[slybrunette]

I have an idea in my head, I just need to actually...form the words, lol. You know how it is.

Thanks hun :)

[kew121]

Great job. Loved the whole last section.

“Celebrate?” She murmurs, moving towards the kitchen with him on her heels. “What exactly did you have in mind?”

He raises an eyebrow.

She hits him square in the chest with a stack of napkins.

Perfectly in character.

[slybrunette]

Thank you! I think the last section was the one that felt most natural to me, so I'm especially glad you enjoyed it :)

[effie214]

In a word: gorgeous.

In another word: spectacular.

Yet another word: amazing.

There were so many lines that stopped me short in their flawlessness:(The ghosts of Jenny and Jeanne Benoit are there to keep him company anyway; It was the future tense mixed with the unsteady tone that bothered him; She’s been back for months and it’s all still baby steps.)

Just jaw-droppingly spectacular all the way around, with prose, structure, characterization and pacing. It may have been, as you said, a "fluke," but if you don't mind, I'll consider it a shooting star--a flash of brilliance I won't soon forget.

[slybrunette]

Wow. That's quite the praise there, and let me tell you how much I appreciate it.

It was a fluke. But the thing with me and flukes? Once they start happening, they tend to keep happening.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

[sara_f_black]

Nice fic!!! I love the end :D

[slybrunette]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!